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"Roses"...please read this is my first post
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"Roses"...please read this is my first post |
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spaz02 Member
since 2005-06-28
Posts 74USA |
"ROSES" Roses are red Violets are blue and this pretty face is all for you Cause what you don't know won't hurt you a bit and this pretty face isn't all that pretty 'Cause if you look inside The fakeness in my eyes you'll see this pretty face isn't always pretty so look real deep deep down in my soul and you'll see all the lies That I have to hide I will always hide Behind this magic mask and on lucky days you'll see the truth If only you knew My secrets and lies you might understand the pain I hide Maybe, just maybe one of these days I'll spill my guts and tell it all Roses are red Violets are blue and this pretty face Isn't pretty at all. |
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spaz02 Member
since 2005-06-28
Posts 74USA |
hey people...this isnt my first write just my first post and i hope you like it..please tell me what you think. Iv'e always come on this site and finally got to join...i hope its all worht it..which i think it is! lol thanks ~Amber A.K.A ~spaz02 |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Welcome Amber!  I liked it..Please check your email for a special greeting! |
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tearsoflove13762 Member
since 2004-09-05
Posts 488Texas.. and yes i have an accent |
amber, welcome to pip and i really loved the idea there are just some areas i personally would change. Cause what you don't know, won't hurt you a bit and this pretty face isn't all that GREAT. 'Cause if you look inside, The fakeness in my eyes you'll see this pretty face isn't always THAT WAY. so look real deep, down in my soul and you'll see all the lies That I have to hide. love will make you beautiful |
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spaz02 Member
since 2005-06-28
Posts 74USA |
thank you for helping me fiz my mistakes...can i fix them and repost this.....? cuz it says not to post the same thin too many times?? |
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shara Member
since 2002-05-21
Posts 69florida/USA |
i liked the concept, the message you wanted to convey to the readers was there, maybe you could try a diff technique next time. look forward to reading more from you...welcome to piptalk. shara |
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