Teen Poetry #7 |
Truth |
HopelessRomanticGuy Member
since 2001-08-17
Posts 495LI, New York |
I hold these truths to be self evident that in this life I'm more than a resident That growing up isn't growing old That I am more than flesh can hold Ignorance may be bliss for a feeble soul but knowledge is extasy for one with a goal That it isn't truly life unless it comes with love be it from another or even from above! That many things are valuable but none more than truth and if you keep your concience clean then you'll never lose your youth. ******************************************* Just a little lighthearted thing I wrote at work the other day in the depths of boredom.Enjoy! |
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drummerboy678 Member
since 2003-10-28
Posts 134 |
Hey man, This is a great example of how a rhyming poem should be. The rhyming is organized, flows well, and the poem doesn't seem to be sculpted around to fit the rhyme at all. I love the opening stanza too.. Some stanzas seem a little cliched/cheesy, but I still enjoyed it. Not a whole lot new is said, but the rhyming is very well done. Good job man |
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tapper798 Member
since 2003-07-20
Posts 353My own world |
HEY! Long time no see? I was begining to wonder. That growing up isn't growing old That I am more than flesh can hold Ignorance may be bliss for a feeble soul but knowledge is extasy for one with a goal I absolutly loved those two lines, in fact I loved this poem, I think it's one of my favorites by you! Great work, like the above said it didn't seem at all structured around the rhyming, more llike the rhyming was based around the flow and point of the poem. Great Job. I'm keeping it, no arguments :-P Hope your doing good! AIM-blueyed angel940 |
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WinterWren Senior Member
since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044...Coming to |
Nice to see you back. This is so awesome! I tried to pick a favorite part, but the more I kept reading, the more I liked. Perfect art here, wonderfully expressed, and definetely going in my library. Needless to say, I can't not do this for such a good piece....*bows* If I could fall asleep tonight |
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