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Peach
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since 2002-11-17
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0 posted 2005-03-31 06:58 PM


I painted my walls with it
I painted my heart
I painted everything around me
It was all green from the start

I was hypnotized by the color
It conveyed everything I wanted
But it made good days go bad
And happiness was too often taunted

You were mine and nobody else’s
But everything was green
Because I painted it with envy
and nothing else could be seen

If you don't stand for something, you'll fall for anything.

© Copyright 2005 Megan Andrews - All Rights Reserved
drummerboy678
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since 2003-10-28
Posts 134

1 posted 2005-04-01 02:33 AM


Not a bad idea, but I would say avoid the rhyme scheme.  It makes everything seem way to forced.

Green always represents envy.  Maybe try a new, more creative way to represent the emotion.

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