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electricxheart
Member

since 2004-09-05

Posts 184
far away from home.

0 posted 2005-02-08 06:26 PM

[one step forward]:

i guess it wouldn’t hurt to use
Capitols
every once in awhile.
but while i’m cursing
The Name Of Love,
i’d like to convince you to take off
your mask because all of your
Insecurities
can be gone in a flash if you
let me
Kiss
you.

[an untrue charade]:

he knows too much about
my eyes. like…
The Windows To Your Soul,
right? well,
his soul is burning straight through
mine and i don’t know if this
Passion
is benefiting
anyone.

[the long sigh]:

the waiting is sighing again.
it doesn’t seem to like
Compromises
or
Pinky Promises
to a
Foolish Girl like me.
replacing naïve, but
who really likes to wait?

[familiar touches]:

memories are nothing without
the sticky glue to hold
them together.
i wanted him to
know one last familiar thought
before the
book closes on our
Demented Ending.

[the ending gratitude]:

so, i hope this
Thank You
is enough for you
to understand
how much i really
Need you
and how much i can’t stand
these
Puzzle Pieces
not fitting together like
we both planned.

You play the song I know.
You are the song I know.

peachesNcream
Senior Member

since 2001-08-21

Posts 513
Ocean Of Tears

1 posted 2005-02-08 08:35 PM

Good job. This was awesome. Goin' in the library! ~Jess

"The greatest thing you'll ever learn is to love, and be loved in return" -Moulin Rouge

fearing-laughter
Senior Member

since 2001-04-24

Posts 605
land of cheese (Wisconsin)

2 posted 2005-02-08 09:24 PM

holy...every curse word ever said that fits here...this rocked! it's so weird, yet awesome. how come no one has replied to this yet besides one other person?? come on PIP, quit being crap! this poem rocked, it's definetely going in my library!

usually all the []'s just get annoying as hell, but these made your poem unique and i loved all the phrases you used throughout the whole thing. it's so cool! definetely going into my library, and pffft at all those unfortunate enough to not reply to this :p.

peace,
Bergundy

At least we're still friends! At least we're still alive!--Alkaline Trio

Savage Quiescence
Member

since 2002-07-29

Posts 326
Wandering

3 posted 2005-02-11 08:56 PM

I agree, you have not only a poem but a work of art. The [] pull it together beautifully. It's good to have another one for the library tonight.

www.livejournal.com/users/alimakins

Jezzika
Member

since 2005-01-05

Posts 154
work

4 posted 2005-02-22 12:17 PM

WOW!!!!!! This was amazing. I cannot wait to read it again. This was really really really good!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Jezzika

you know he really wants me

Lexy
Senior Member

since 2003-01-28

Posts 1038
California

5 posted 2005-02-23 09:14 AM

wow.
that is intense.
to a
Foolish Girl like me.
replacing naïve, but
who really likes to wait?

I like the whole theme.

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