Calling Love, I Can't Hide Everything

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Teen Poetry #7

Calling Love, I Can't Hide Everything

OtherSideOfTheMirror
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since 2002-12-19

Posts 245

0 posted 2005-01-24 01:08 PM

Oh LOVE LOVE LOVE how i MISS YOU SO!
You made me so happy, but you had to go
Oh how I just wish you could know
How you brought to me woe
And I loved to suckle your pinky toe
And loved to prance around in the snow
And play with fresh cookie dough...

O woe, woe is me
Sitting here alone by a tree
I think of you, thinking of me,
and remember that I'm sitting by a tree.
O no, I got stung by a bee.
A bee that reminds me of you and me.
You hurt me badly, can't you see?
That you stung me, stung me, like a bee.

Lexy
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since 2003-01-28

Posts 1038
California

1 posted 2005-01-24 06:42 PM

It has a childish feel. a not so serious pain. I like it. almost sarcastic seeming when you say woe is me...

tearsoflove13762
Member

since 2004-09-05

Posts 488
Texas.. and yes i have an accent

2 posted 2005-01-24 08:27 PM

hmmm... its different... but i like it

HopelessRomanticGuy
Member

since 2001-08-17

Posts 495
LI, New York

3 posted 2005-01-26 01:00 AM

lol! Well, it made me laugh, and that's become a rare thing these days, so thanks.

I liked this. It breaks free of those structures that I feel so confined in. And the whimsical tone that flows through it makes it - dare I say it? - cute. Please. Please Write More. More like this one. Hmm... Just had a thought... "Whimsical Pain". *shrugs* Anyway, great poem!

-Rich

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OtherSideOfTheMirror
Member

since 2002-12-19

Posts 245

4 posted 2005-01-27 03:30 PM

This poem was a joke.

Notice the title is poetry in itself:

C alling
L ove
I
C an't
H ide
E verything.

= CLICHE (e being the accent agu that gives it that "ay" sound.

)

In other words, this encompasses the vast amount of poetry that in my opinion, blows.

The typical, cliche, meaningless poetry.

Some are more entertaining than others.
I'm glad this one was well received.
I like mocking poetry with poetry.
Not because I disapprove of the artform.
But because a lot of the sluff is just not that profound.

No offense intended... I'm glad you liked it... and that you saw the sarcasm and childish pleasure I gained from writing it.

cassiopeia.

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