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tapper798
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since 2003-07-20
Posts 353
My own world

0 posted 2005-01-19 10:43 PM


K so this poem is somewhat cliche` but lemme know what you think nonetheless!

My One desire


Time after time, I've tried to trust,

but it always seemed a lost cause,

I ended up getting hurt again,

and it put my heart on pause.


Regaining it strength, I heal slowly,

I wonder what was the use.

I wondered this day in and day out,

until the day I found you.


I let go of the outer me,

that everyone seems to accept,

they all assume that what they see

is all that they should expect.


Looking deeper inside my soul,

you opened up my heart,

letting it's wings learn to fly,

let out of me a hidden part.


You're cure of me inspired me,

and you were suddenly all I thought,

I wanted to know everything about you,

all the battles you had fought.


Dreams may be dreams, and you were mine,

I wish it was something you could see.

You opened me up, let my heart take a say,

You allowed for me to be me.


I wish upon the brightest star,

the one that leaves me inspired,

for you'd find that in my heart,

you are my one desire.

-Erin

AIM-blueyed angel940
One day u'll ask which is more important,u or my life. I'll answer my life and u'll walk away never knowing u are my life.

© Copyright 2005 Erin - All Rights Reserved
HopelessRomanticGuy
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since 2001-08-17
Posts 495
LI, New York
1 posted 2005-01-19 11:51 PM


Cliche?  Yes.  A bad thing?  Def. Not.  Nothing wrong with expressing common emotions.  Especially when those are hope and love.  Sad poems and rant poems may be par for the course, but I've got to admit, I'd rather read a good love poem anyday.  Just like this one.  Perhaps one of my favorites from you yet!


                                     -Rich

"I am a part of the world that I hate/I wish the end would come faster, my world's a distaster," - Crossfade "Starless"

tearsoflove13762
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since 2004-09-05
Posts 488
Texas.. and yes i have an accent
2 posted 2005-01-20 12:25 PM


I have to agree with Rich sometimes ranting is just a must...
laura

Mysilentsaviour25
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since 2006-04-10
Posts 12
California
3 posted 2006-04-10 05:04 PM


This really is a good poem, i especially like the last stanza...
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