Teen Poetry #7 |
My One Desire |
tapper798 Member
since 2003-07-20
Posts 353My own world |
K so this poem is somewhat cliche` but lemme know what you think nonetheless! My One desire Time after time, I've tried to trust, but it always seemed a lost cause, I ended up getting hurt again, and it put my heart on pause. Regaining it strength, I heal slowly, I wonder what was the use. I wondered this day in and day out, until the day I found you. I let go of the outer me, that everyone seems to accept, they all assume that what they see is all that they should expect. Looking deeper inside my soul, you opened up my heart, letting it's wings learn to fly, let out of me a hidden part. You're cure of me inspired me, and you were suddenly all I thought, I wanted to know everything about you, all the battles you had fought. Dreams may be dreams, and you were mine, I wish it was something you could see. You opened me up, let my heart take a say, You allowed for me to be me. I wish upon the brightest star, the one that leaves me inspired, for you'd find that in my heart, you are my one desire. -Erin AIM-blueyed angel940 |
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HopelessRomanticGuy Member
since 2001-08-17
Posts 495LI, New York |
Cliche? Yes. A bad thing? Def. Not. Nothing wrong with expressing common emotions. Especially when those are hope and love. Sad poems and rant poems may be par for the course, but I've got to admit, I'd rather read a good love poem anyday. Just like this one. Perhaps one of my favorites from you yet! -Rich "I am a part of the world that I hate/I wish the end would come faster, my world's a distaster," - Crossfade "Starless" |
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tearsoflove13762 Member
since 2004-09-05
Posts 488Texas.. and yes i have an accent |
I have to agree with Rich sometimes ranting is just a must... laura |
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Mysilentsaviour25 Junior Member
since 2006-04-10
Posts 12California |
This really is a good poem, i especially like the last stanza... |
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