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BrokenDreams
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In The Clouds

0 posted 2004-12-30 09:12 PM


Look at her. What do you see?
Perfection personified - flawless beauty, gentle manner.
She is everything they all want to be.
Look closer. Look though her eyes into the mirror.
See the shame, pity, and pain.
See how her lips tremble beneath her pretty smile.
See how tears of glass shatter her perfect porcelain face.


This is the first thing I've written in a very long time, and it's definitely not my best piece. I think it needs quite a bit of work, so any suggestions would be much appreciated. Thanks.
Jenni

"The course of true love never did run smooth." -William Shakespeare

© Copyright 2004 Jennifer Rick - All Rights Reserved
Jezzika
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since 2005-01-05
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work
1 posted 2005-01-06 10:49 AM


I think this was a great!! I completley get it.  You here alot of people say how they wish they were popular but they do not realize what is really going on!

Jezzika

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