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chasing rain
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since 2001-05-15
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0 posted 2004-12-20 07:33 PM


the old record grooves have worn away with the last
of chopin's greatest hits.
how we used to sing words to his wordless works,
how we tainted them...

branded them our own.

and the ice cream man in his ice cream truck
would interrupt our operatic showdown
with showtunes of his own
and we'd run outside to hear him play
forgetting our money to pay him
inside, and we'd miss the opportune time
to ask him for an encore
that we could eat.

you'd take me by the hand
(though i'd rather it was an ice cream cone)
and tell me,"next time, we'll get him."
and i'd smile
(though i can't remember if it was the thought of the ice cream cone
or the thought of you that did it).

and we'd head inside and peel potatoes
and sing to the beatles
or watch them on t.v.
and wonder why mom and pop liked them so much
because they had bad hair.

so i sit here, still, with a desk full of papers
a calculator, gum, and a box of paperclips
i've lost 9 pens and an eraser today
and the only song i sing, i sing in my head
to the tune of elevator music.

i miss your hand (and the ice cream cones)
and i miss our chopin, and bad hair.
i miss the 5¢ bubble gum that we never ate
but sold to the school yard bullies for 20¢ each
(we fed the world that day).
i miss a lot of things that we couldn't keep...

but most of all

i miss the way things never were...or ever have been, here.

--
It's been a while...

Glad to see some new faces around here. "Hey"s and "hi"s to the oldies and the newbies!

V.V.,
Leah

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Lexy
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since 2003-01-28
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1 posted 2004-12-21 05:46 PM


wow
Its so much like a story. and I think sometimes people get caught up in explaining emotion. but this had so much emotion with out even trying.
amazing.
I love your writing.

There's no reason I'm oversleeping
dreamin' my life away...

*Alli4000*
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2 posted 2004-12-21 08:55 PM


Agreed...this is amazing.
I guess I'm kinda a newbie here, so hi! lol. Keep Posting Leah!

~Alli~

Happy Holidays!

Kaos
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since 2001-08-02
Posts 317
between space and time
3 posted 2005-05-12 02:07 PM


Ah, to walk down memory lane and reminisce things of the past... ~blinks~ man is it really 15 years later where'd my childhood go? lol  excellent write i enjoyed this one alot.  Thanks for bringing back some good memories.

"I go to parties sometimes until 4, it's hard to leave when you can't find the door..." Joe Walsh

   (I Ride The Short Bus)

fearing-laughter
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since 2001-04-24
Posts 605
land of cheese (Wisconsin)
4 posted 2005-05-13 07:46 PM


hi,
yay you're back, i have missed your stuff...this one is really cool, very creative in my opinion. it makes me feel old as well! i guess i'm an old pip-er too, four years that went by really fast. anywho, i really liked this poem, especially the part about the beatles, it made me laugh...thanks for sharing, and don't take such a long time to post the next one! :-p

-bergundy

At least we're still friends! At least we're still alive!--Alkaline Trio

cherish
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since 2001-03-25
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swimming in fairy floss...........
5 posted 2005-05-24 05:13 AM


heya babe...i dont think ive ever had a bad word to say about your sctuff....just poppin in and saying that i miss your words.

fall quietly...

Marshalzu
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Lurking
6 posted 2005-06-15 07:20 AM


I always enjoy the imagery that you create and the language that you employ it has such a wonderful continuity to it, every time I read one of your pieces it feels as though I am slowly unravelling a curtain and with each thread I get to see a little bit more of your world. Keep up the great work.
Fading Away
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7 posted 2005-08-19 10:46 PM


Oh man, reading these poems with this calibur makes me realize just how much I miss it around here.

Leah - beautiful!  I love the integration of the beauty of music and the beauty of words.  Tainting the words... I love that line.

I miss you people.  Just came around for a trip down memory lane and to say that I miss your words.

Always Lurking,
Jen

((behind this fuzzy haze I can see that we are coffee and milk mixed, perfect, but not for everyone.))

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