Teen Poetry #7 |
The Spiteful Workings of Your Mind |
WinterWren Senior Member
since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044...Coming to |
Im not sure how I feel about this one yet. Not my best work, but they can't all be good all the time right? Here it is anyway, with all of it's faults... The Spiteful Workings of Your Mind And Im only slightly disappointed that you don’t care If you were expecting more than this response then you’re going to be let down Im sure you were looking forward to at least a shocked reaction and no doubt you even reveled in the thought of me crying because of you But I’ve forgotten how to shed tears and I wouldn’t give you the satisfaction of seeing past this exterior. Your angry look in the face of my indifferent one finally brings forth an emotion to the surface but it’s just a sardonic smile at the irony of your situation I see your mind start to work as you think of a way to elongate my pain you grin as you say “Should we try to make this work, my dear?” And I’ll just laugh and tell you, Your game of pretend was more boring than most, the costume you used was so easy to see through and the only thing entertaining was the way I had you fooled you thought I fell for your cheap lies but I could always determine your next move. Others have tried to break me much before you maybe I should thank them for tempering me so because now I can tell you, you lose. But Im comforted |
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~DreamChild~ Senior Member
since 2001-04-23
Posts 544in your dreams |
i thought this poem was really well worded, and full of thought, and emotion. all characteristics that i greatly admire. i enjoyed your work here tremendously. |
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HopelessRomanticGuy Member
since 2001-08-17
Posts 495LI, New York |
All I have to say, Stef (it looks funny with the 'ph,' hope this sub is ok), is D--- right! You got it right, I hate people who use their ability of manipulation to cause pain and use people for their own selfish reasons. I'm glad you could beat this person at their own game. I really like this poem, and you should have pride in it! It really is great, as is the soul behind it. Glad to see something new by you here; I was getting worried about you. Almost enough to warrent an email. Nice to have you back! -Rich Winamp Is Playing: "Feelin' Way To Da*n Good" Nickelback Feelin' Way To Da*n Good "I'm burning in the heavens, |
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WinterWren Senior Member
since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044...Coming to |
You were worried about me? I feel better now, Yeah I was just having a really bad month. Thanks for the concern. But Im comforted |
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tapper798 Member
since 2003-07-20
Posts 353My own world |
dang lol this poem makes me wanna stand up and say "you go girl!" hehe awesome write, and if this is from personal experience(which I'm sure it is since most poems are) then I'm glad that you were able to beat him at his own game! AIM-blueyed angel940 |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
Hey there Stephanie! You may not think this was your best work, but I still think that it's up there in the -awesome-amazing category. Glad your better now. ~Alli~ Happy Holidays! |
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HopelessRomanticGuy Member
since 2001-08-17
Posts 495LI, New York |
Don't worry, Alli. After all, imitation is the most sincere form of flattery...lol! And yeah, Stef, I was worried. It seemed like you might have taken a leave of absence similar to mine; and if they we're like mine, then there was a serious reason for it, usually something sad and unhappy. That, and I just like seeing your poems and replies, and was starting to miss ya! -Rich Winamp Is Playing: "Don't Panic" Coldplay Parachutes "I'm burning in the heavens, |
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Savage Quiescence Member
since 2002-07-29
Posts 326Wandering |
Tapper already hit the nail on the head, "You go girl!" |
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Spine Grinder Senior Member
since 2000-10-28
Posts 1127Standing In Silence... |
I really liked this, and I'm sure a lot of people can relate to it in one way or another, I'm glad you can tell the difference between someone caring, and someone faking. Well done. "Cuz I'm broken, when I'm lonesome, and I don't feel right when you're gone away..."~ Seether |
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peachesNcream Senior Member
since 2001-08-21
Posts 513Ocean Of Tears |
Amazing work. Good job! ~Jess "The greatest thing you'll ever learn is to love, and be loved in return" -Moulin Rouge |
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