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~DreamChild~
Senior Member

since 2001-04-23

Posts 544
in your dreams

0 posted 2004-12-04 12:07 PM

tis only a game
playing on for sheer delight.

is not vanity indeed in vain?

tis only a pen.
inking merely make-believe.

why is there fiction at all?

tis only a heart.
beating on cold cage bars.

does freedom truly exist?

red_angel*16
Member

since 2004-09-04

Posts 71

1 posted 2004-12-04 04:40 AM

I wonder why not alot of people
postedv a comment or something.
well, dreamchild great write !!!!

always and truly
christine

WinterWren
Senior Member

since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

2 posted 2004-12-04 11:00 PM

This deserves more replies! Come on people.
Very beautiful write, I especially love the line, "Tis only a heart, beating on cold cage bars."
Great work,
thanks for sharing.

But Im comforted
by the fact that I can hurt inside
all I want to
without anyone ever knowing
~WinterWren~

~DreamChild~
Senior Member

since 2001-04-23

Posts 544
in your dreams

3 posted 2004-12-04 11:04 PM

gee, thanks wren.

HopelessRomanticGuy
Member

since 2001-08-17

Posts 495
LI, New York

4 posted 2004-12-05 11:00 PM

I daresay I'll reply to this, if only to bask in the afterglow of the work of a poetic genius. I'm always so hesitant to reply to your work; afraid the uncultured tones of my verse might forever sully the pages of these poems. However, fear is not a good reason for avoidance, and thus, I enter, as a young child might a grand cathedral: whisper quiet and full of awe as he tiptoes through the door. Such wonderful pieces you write! Just thought you'd like to know.

-Rich

Winamp Is Playing:
"Give Me More"
Apartment 26
Music For The Massive

"I'm burning in the heavens,
and I'm drowning in a hell.
And my soul is in a coma
and none of my friends can tell,"
~Take Me~ Papa Roach

~DreamChild~
Senior Member

since 2001-04-23

Posts 544
in your dreams

5 posted 2004-12-06 01:44 PM

gee, thanks rich. i'm truly flattered.

blushing, again.

*Alli4000*

Member Elite

since 2004-03-21

Posts 3188
The World of Poetry

6 posted 2004-12-06 06:17 PM

I'm guessing this is about...yeh.

"tis only a game
playing on for sheer delight."

"tis only a pen.
inking merely make-believe."

The point of this all Derrick, is that you never mentioned anywhere that this whole thing was just a game...I mean, I'm not trying to get myself involved or start anything, but you never said it, and may have hurt someone in the process. That's all I have to say.
Other than that...if I didn't know what this poem was talking about, I would think it was a very good write.

~Alli~

Happy Holidays!

~DreamChild~
Senior Member

since 2001-04-23

Posts 544
in your dreams

7 posted 2004-12-07 10:34 PM

point taken alli.

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