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Lisa_bebe15 Member
since 2001-11-15
Posts 151Florida 
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I close my eyes, I can feel the cool breeze hitting my face, The smell of fall surrounds me. Seeing the leaves, Colors every where I turn, Bursting out of every leaf. Hearing your sweet voice. It brings me all back. Back to when I was with you. Only a month ago we were walking through the halls hand in hand, Its was like being in a forin place, Not knowing where I was going. Im not in my territory anymore, only yours. But still feeling so safe with you leading the way. Laying on the cold grass with you, I can still feel you holding me so tight. Your warmth warming me. But than a warm breeze brings me back, And a tear rolls down my face. Thats when I realize, I'm home. |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
Wow, Lisa...good write. One thing though: "Its was like being in a forin place". Did you mean, "It was like being in a foreign place"? Just wondering, sorry if I'm wrong.  Other than that, great write. Keep Posting!  ~Alli~ *:.AIM = Alli4000.:* |
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Savage Quiescence Member
since 2002-07-29
Posts 326Wandering |
This write hit home for me. It is amazing how quickly things can change. I enjoyed this piece. There were a few errors, but I think they were just typos. Thank you for sharing. |
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broken627 Member
since 2003-11-26
Posts 66Eugene Oregon |
I can really relate to you... This poem was really good...if you have time you should check some of my poems out<3 later~! -*-There’s still a little bit of your song in my ear There’s still a little bit of your words I long to hear You step a little closer to me So close that I can't see what's going on-*- ~Cannonball by Damien Rice-*- |
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