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red_angel*16
Member

since 2004-09-04

Posts 71

0 posted 2004-10-11 05:41 AM

As night falls down
I finally see the stars rise above me,
I feel the wind blow on my face
and I notice something missing...you...

When you went away
I couldnt do the things I used to do
It's just hard to except the fact
that your never coming back.

On the day we said our last and final good bye
I couldn't stop myself from crying all these tears,
or even look at myself in the mirror
for what had happen to you,
I have always wondered
why had God taken you away so soon
when we havent even completed our love.

When the day comes for
me to depart from earth
I hope you'll wait for me in heaven
and welcome me to my new home
and we'll finally be together at last
but untill then do not forget me....

*Alli4000*

Member Elite

since 2004-03-21

Posts 3188
The World of Poetry

1 posted 2004-12-10 07:31 PM

I was just skimming through teen and saw that this had no replies and was like

!!

"I hope you'll wait for me in heaven
and welcome me to my new home
and we'll finally be together at last
but untill then do not forget me...."

I really liked that part. This write is so sad....is it a true write?

Just a suggestion - I would fix the spelling errors if I was you. Since it is past the 24hour edit limit and you would want to do that, just let any moderator know.

~Alli~

Happy Holidays!

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

2 posted 2004-12-11 03:43 AM

seems like you have completed your love
just because he isn't physically around it doesn't mean it can't happen
thanks for sharing
keep it up

red_angel*16
Member

since 2004-09-04

Posts 71

3 posted 2004-12-11 04:22 AM

i just wrote this cause
during that time i was watching this movie which was really sad,
and then i wanted to write a poem
about how it would feel like to be in her position.
so if your thinking if this is true,
well its not so thanks !!!!!!!!

Kellie_Cantrell
Senior Member

since 2002-05-22

Posts 1667
New York

4 posted 2004-12-11 04:35 AM

Tears.... wow. Great piece, I have salty tears in my eyes.

-Kellie

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

5 posted 2004-12-12 07:21 PM

you made it so believable
that only tells you how good you wrote it

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