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red_angel*16
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0 posted 2004-11-26 05:42 AM



I feel as we are drifting away
because you changed so much
that i hardly know you at all
we use to meet and kiss goodbye
but now you wont even say hi
whats going with you?
are we through with this relationship
is this your final goodbye?
because i dont think i could wait any longer
i used to care for you so much
that I thought this love will last.
you told me you loved me
and said you will never ever hurt me
but if your words are true
and deep you would tell me whats wrong
so please give me an answer
i dont want this love to end yet
because I still care deeply for you
but it might just happen if
you dont tell me whats going on with you...

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1 posted 2004-11-26 06:13 AM


Some great sentiments and good writing

Andrew

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2 posted 2004-11-26 02:46 PM


"We use to meet and kiss goodbye
but now you wont even say hi
whats going with you?
are we through with this relationship
is this your final goodbye?"


Yeah, this has happened to me. *sigh* it sucks. Just hang in there ok?
The poem was good, keep writing...as for the title, I'll think about it and let you know.

~Alli~

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