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Open My pandora's box
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Open My pandora's box |
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Gottigirl505 New Member
since 2006-02-06
Posts 4New Mexico, Us |
When I turn the corner to the class, I fell like shouldn't. Why did you jus pass, I wanted to say something but I couldn't. I Keep my feelings locked up tight, they can't excape like Pandora's box. I just dream of of a sweet night, that you come to me with keys for the locks. They say We'll never talk, They said We'll never be. But then again they told Moses, He couldn't part a sea. But I'm tired secrets, and not able to open the box, But thats over now, You came and bust'd the locks. Now we're happily married, Living by the sea. We stand and talk about how we will always be. With your hand in mine, We close the box together. With nothing left inside, And that for forever |
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XxnoraxX Member
since 2006-01-24
Posts 122<3 MA,,,USA <3 |
That is such a sweet poem and so creative- I enjoyed reading this so much!- XoXo, |
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latteaddict213
since 2006-02-17
Posts 523Colorado |
very creative and totally sweet! loved it! nice work! Jessica |
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byski Member
since 2006-01-26
Posts 235Alberta, Canada |
It is very nice poem with a good mood and a warm message. But i'm guessing you wrote this when your mood was the exact opposite. I really did enjoy it though, very uplifting just at points hard to read. |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
I like this poem! Mostly because i like how you added the thing about Moses parting the sea, and the title of your poem... I agree with what someone said though, it is a little hard to read in places, i don't know why, it just feels like it is... Great poem though! @-->--- |
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