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WinterWren
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...Coming to

0 posted 2004-11-10 04:37 PM



All the things I held so dear
you tore them away
and I can see what you really mean
when you try to hide your eyes.
The truth was right in front of me
but the lies were so much more beautiful
I drank in every word you said
and told you I believed
It’s not that I was being deceived
you just aren’t who you seem.

Im fading into someone else
falling into darkness
reaching for a hand to hold
and losing grip on consciousness

too much time spent
trying to regain my confidence
and Im left with nothing again
I can never just be me.
Im laughing through my tears
as I turn away from you
the anger in your voice rings clear
but I no longer care what you think.
I try to drop this facade, but it clings
maybe the person I pretend to be is really who Iam.

Im fading into someone else
falling into darkness
reaching for a hand to hold
and losing grip on consciousness.

But Im comforted
by the fact that I can hurt inside
all I want to
without anyone ever knowing
~WinterWren~

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ShadyMakaveli
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1 posted 2004-11-10 09:39 PM


Very nicely put...i've been gone from this forum for too long and missed reading your work...that's for sure
*Alli4000*
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2 posted 2004-11-10 10:06 PM


"Im fading into someone else
falling into darkness
reaching for a hand to hold
and losing grip on consciousness."


Woah...loved that part! Loved this poem actually...sounded just like a song to me! Great write keep posting Stephanie!!

~Alli~

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peachesNcream
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Ocean Of Tears
3 posted 2004-11-11 12:28 PM


I tried to think of a title to help ya out but they were all cliche. I'm not too good with titles. Sorry! This is awesome, great work..as always! Another one for my library...! ~Jess

"When the power of love overcomes the love of power the world will know peace." -Jimi Hendrix

aussie teen
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since 2003-09-27
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4 posted 2004-11-11 06:39 AM


this is beautiful and im sure everyone knows what yyou meean....  and a title???? mabe fading..... not really sure on anything else...
keep beautiful ones like this coming....
Ruth

live life as if your going to die tomorow....... but love as if your going to live forever......

~DreamChild~
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since 2001-04-23
Posts 544
in your dreams
5 posted 2004-11-13 08:42 PM


ooh... too long, lol! sry.

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