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HopelessRomanticGuy
Member

since 2001-08-17

Posts 495
LI, New York

0 posted 2004-11-04 02:01 PM

When you promised her forever
She smiled and gave a kiss

What did you have left?
When you found what forever held for you?

A life of nonexistence
Of love never again to be returned

Yet a promise is a promise
A promise is to be kept

And you pledged your love forever
So now what’s left to you?

What solutions have you left?
Where can you go to end the pain?

It’s chilling when you find
The only option you’ve left

Is to cut forever short
That would be best

You turn to the blade once more
Calling to you like an old, familiar friend

The pommel resting in your hand
A feeling of belonging in your veins

Bringing back memories of times before
When you took your life in your hands

Seeking to cut destiny’s hold
To be free of what you’ve become

The blade pierces soft flesh
Crimson droplets dancing along gleaming steel

Pride stays your hand;
Hope dulls the pain

Without a word
You turn away

Silently you return the blade;
You’ve lived another day.

But still the blade remains…

pammy
Member

since 2003-11-27

Posts 50
California

1 posted 2004-11-08 08:58 AM

wow! this one kinda hits ya! but it was very good...alot of emotion in the words! i like it

~*Pammy*~
"Scarred from the past, longing for the future,and fearing the present"

I_dont_know_me
Junior Member

since 2003-12-08

Posts 48
UK, Cymru

2 posted 2004-11-08 11:27 AM

Silently you return the blade;
You’ve lived another day.

But still the blade remains

wow a great way to end a great poem thanks for the read ~Emma~

earthdust
Member

since 2003-10-28

Posts 53
predestined and foreknown

3 posted 2004-11-12 12:57 PM

a very talented work youve done here.
such a talent expressed positively could prove to be most pleasant. however, the saddening thought of suicide is most unpleasant. may you find the freedom of happiness within your own heart.

" Understanding is more valuable than diamonds. If you can understand me, Then you are a very rich person. "

TY!

*Alli4000*

Member Elite

since 2004-03-21

Posts 3188
The World of Poetry

4 posted 2004-11-28 04:51 PM

Rich, So sorry I missed this!

Such an emotional write, I feel your pain.

~Alli~

*:.AIM = Alli4000.:*
Don’t cry because it’s over, smile because it happened...

Lisa_bebe15
Member

since 2001-11-15

Posts 151
Florida

5 posted 2004-11-29 08:56 AM

wow, man, i remember those days...Its been hard on me, and i know how it feels to want to do that. Im a well, nevermind, i think you understand....
Maybe one day true love will really find you, and when its there, embrase it, and cherish it.
If you ever wanna talk feel free to email me

Kellie_Cantrell
Senior Member

since 2002-05-22

Posts 1667
New York

6 posted 2004-11-29 12:48 PM

Wow, I am speechless, I guess that says something right? this piece was excellent.

tapper798
Member

since 2003-07-20

Posts 353
My own world

7 posted 2004-12-02 06:14 PM

Pride stays your hand;
Hope dulls the pain

Without a word
You turn away

Silently you return the blade;
You’ve lived another day.

But still the blade remains…

I loved that part. It creats such a picture yet you get the meaning so clearly. Very good job, you have some major talent at expressing yourself in poetry!(lol well I think so!)

Love is giving him the ability to break your heart...but trusting him enough to know he won't.

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