Teen Poetry #7 |
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For the record. |
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Marshalzu![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking ![]() |
For the record. 29/10/04 Hello, how are you? the same message repeats the soundtrack of our lives is stuck somewhere the disc got scratched blood beneath our fingernails... Andrew ![]() Lost and Found. |
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*Alli4000*![]()
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
"Hello, how are you? the same message repeats the soundtrack of our lives is stuck" Loved that part. This is the first oppertunity that I've had to read one of your poems, and I think that you are a great writer! Keep posting! ![]() ~Alli~ *:.AIM = Alli4000.:* My Journal |
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Cinderelly Member
since 2001-12-31
Posts 189NM, USA |
This is a great poem! It's short and sweet, I love it! * Be happy for this moment. This moment is your life * |
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electricxheart Member
since 2004-09-05
Posts 184far away from home. |
wow, this style is one that i've tried to do in my writing many times before. says such a strong meaning in only a few short words. you did this with great skill, i loved it. -kelly i could be an accident, but i'm still trying. |
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~DreamChild~ Senior Member
since 2001-04-23
Posts 544in your dreams |
tight... ~Express Yourself~ |
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Marshalzu![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Thank you for the replies, they are appreciated. |
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Your poems were always something to think about. I like that. It is my preferred article of reading. You did this one well. Very profound, my son. Have a good one, Zu ![]() "One good thing about music: when it hits you feel no pain"- Bob Marley |
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young_blood Senior Member
since 2003-09-19
Posts 1115Indianapolis, IN |
i wish that it were longer. you had a good thing started with the whole disc scratched thing. it feels more like an introductory stanza to a longer poem than an actual poem. just my thoughts. |
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Kellie_Cantrell Senior Member
since 2002-05-22
Posts 1667New York |
Simple yet deep and Its still got my mind spinning. |
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punkrockerrobin![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-05-15
Posts 1180Sparks, NV |
you can always take a short lil verse of words make it mean something and catch the mind of someone. robin hi my name is robin and i am addicted to poetry and matt! |
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PoetryIsLife![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-10-27
Posts 1763...in my boxers... |
How are you doing, Zu? Just wanted to say this piece was interesting, for sure. Well done, man. -Titus |
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