Teen Poetry #7 |
Blue Sky - REVISED - Any comments most appreciated... |
ShadyMakaveli Member
since 2002-08-21
Posts 128 |
Blue Sky A once Blue Sky Shines sun no more Clouds have gathered While innocence descends The power of thunder Gives beginning an end... Disappointment. The storm has begun Consequences follow Devastating earthquakes Demolish what was built Memories buried in rubble Overcome with guilt... Destruction. In a sea of emotions Heavy waves crash down Questions with no answers Words of empty explanations Fall upon deaf ears Taking blame with frustration... Despair. With a few spoken words Unable to express emotions Life no longer makes sense Memories of a distant past The world has been shattered Never expected this to last... Divorce. Never forget the once Blue Sky... Slight changes...but want to know what people think of the changes...thanx in advance... |
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I_dont_know_me Junior Member
since 2003-12-08
Posts 48UK, Cymru |
wow, what a great poem i especially liked "In a sea of emotions Heavy waves crash down Questions with no answers Words of empty explanations Fall upon deaf ears Taking blame with frustration..." great write x emma x |
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~DreamChild~ Senior Member
since 2001-04-23
Posts 544in your dreams |
bump... back to the top! {this poem was sturated with pain , and sorrow, such heartfelt emotion!} ~DreamChild's~ poem of the week! lol ~Express Yourself~ |
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punkrockerrobin
since 2001-05-15
Posts 1180Sparks, NV |
great stuff i liked it. keep on sharin. robin hi my name is robin and i am addicted to poetry and matt! |
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ShadyMakaveli Member
since 2002-08-21
Posts 128 |
Thank you all for your responses...It is really appreciated... |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
Just like I said about the orginal version...amazing. ~Alli~ *:.AIM = Alli4000.:* My Journal |
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