Teen Poetry #7 |
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Broken Wishing Star |
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smalltownmind Junior Member
since 2003-10-24
Posts 21 |
this is a song that my band plays...i thought i would post my lyrics and get some feedback. if you would like to hear them email me...i should hopefully have the songs online soon. Broken Wishing Star by Small Town Mind If you heard me cry would you hold me tight and tell me "Everything will be alright"? If I could give you all of your dreams would you say to me, "You're not the one who's in my dreams..."? We've been through this a thousand times before... you always said you always dreamed of something more... Chorus: You wished on a star You wished so hard You found your love Now you're on the run and when all is said and done you'll know that I am not the one for you... I tell myself that i can see through all of your lies... and all your compromises. you make believe that you can see through me... you don't understand me at all... Chorus: "if you want me back...you're gonna have to ask." |
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dertah Senior Member
since 2003-06-18
Posts 584 |
good oonnnnnnnnnnneeeeeeeeeeeee |
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LiL-Jew Junior Member
since 2003-10-28
Posts 30 |
This kind of reminds me of a country christmas song called "Holidays" but its really good, keep it up. |
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magic_612 Member
since 2003-07-31
Posts 190NB, Canada |
sounds awesome! i would definately love to hear some of your songs ![]() |
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young_blood Senior Member
since 2003-09-19
Posts 1115Indianapolis, IN |
ummm....this was pretty good, it seemed to be kinds forced rhyming, but i bet it sounds better with music. now im alone, but not lonely like before |
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lauren03 Member
since 2002-01-04
Posts 64oh, usa |
hmmm............ interesting... little choppy at times though |
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peachesNcream Senior Member
since 2001-08-21
Posts 513Ocean Of Tears |
This was a good poem. But I espically want to comment on your quote. It's from The Used, right? Great choice!! LOL. ~Jess ![]() "Some of us think holding on makes us strong; but sometimes it is letting go." -Herman Hesse |
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frolicking dolphin Member
since 2003-02-23
Posts 268my own special world |
I really liked that one, and I'd like to hear some of your song but i don't know how to email you cuz you don't have the little email thingy as an option, either that or I'm just stupid which is very possible ~*~Karen~*~ |
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