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Cure my Tragedy
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Cure my Tragedy |
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Pollita Member
since 2002-07-25
Posts 220the unknown realm of insanity |
The rain pours on my shattered soul Falling on me so innocently My surrendered faith lies in a hole Only to mock me so elegantly The curves of your smile Has sliced into my bleeding heart My legacy left in a pile For you to find and tear apart A suicide left in your hands Insanity plaqued my decaying corpse My veins cut into tiny strands My lost love has touched you once more. * Is adult entertainment killing our children or is killing our children entertaining adults? * -Brian Warner |
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electricxheart Member
since 2004-09-05
Posts 184far away from home. |
i really liked this. the flow was good and the words and imagery you used were amazing. awesome  -kelly i could be an accident, but i'm still trying. |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
Like Kelly said, the imagry was awesome. This was my favorite part: "The rain pours on my shattered soul Falling on me so innocently" Nice job Delaney..keep posting here at pip!  ~Alli~ *:.AIM = Alli4000.:* My Journal |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
your metaphor conveys your pain quite well Nice writing |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
Del... wow... this is freaking awesome ^_^ and then He created the horse... |
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Pollita Member
since 2002-07-25
Posts 220the unknown realm of insanity |
Thank you everyone. I really appreciated your views on this piece. And thanks you expecially Rhonda...*hugs* hehe. Again, thank you very much for telling me what you thought. ^_^ * Is adult entertainment killing our children or is killing our children entertaining adults? * -Brian Warner |
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