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WinterWren
Senior Member

since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

0 posted 2004-10-10 09:45 PM

The wind carries my whisper away
“Don’t leave me alone.”
Red and orange leaves
swirl up in a spiral around me.

The words are written on them
if you just look closer
the truth will be seen
if you go back to that cold november.

I won’t try to hide my tears
this time
maybe the sharp sting of them
will help me feel again.

The trees are letting go
dropping the garments of their beauty
to let the wind whirl them on display
until their sharp color fades.

The brightness in your memory
fades also
but you will remember
if you go back to that cold november.

Some questions will never be answered
do you think about me?
Some memories will never stop hurting
you can only push them away.

Don’t hide your eyes
(I will forget)
don’t pity me
(I will move on.)

So kiss good-bye
those wishes that never came true
(you can heal your own wounds)
and go back just one last time to that cold november.

WinterWren-
Counting stars wishing I was ok,
Crashing down was my biggest mistake.

*Belabebeautiful*

Senior Member

since 2003-01-03

Posts 696
washington, USA

1 posted 2004-10-10 10:47 PM

Of everything I've read from you this is the most amazing piece I have ever had the privledge to see. I read it three times before I even took the time to respond...I am in awe...
~Live and Laugh~

Don't look to me for perfection for I will surely let you down.
~Bella~

*Alli4000*

Member Elite

since 2004-03-21

Posts 3188
The World of Poetry

2 posted 2004-10-10 11:46 PM

Omg...this poem is just so amazing. Forget it, amazing doesn't even halfly describe it. It..woah..I can't explain it...it's just leaving me speechless.
But I can tell you for sure that this is going into my libaray.

~Alli~

*:.AIM = Alli4000.:*
Don’t cry because it’s over, smile because it happened...

kissa~rachelle
Senior Member

since 2003-11-27

Posts 988
nowhere special

3 posted 2004-10-11 12:06 PM

I agree with bela. This may be the best i have ever read from you. I really loved it. I could almost picture that day....

Your imagery was amazing...i am definetly saving this..

Karissa

I ask why, but in my mind,
I find i cant really rely on myself.
~~~Linkin Park~~~

Strider612
Junior Member

since 2003-12-21

Posts 46
Alabama, United States of America

4 posted 2004-10-11 12:29 PM

I'd have to say that was well-written. Good job and good description there...not much else I can say about it.

WinterWren
Senior Member

since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

5 posted 2004-10-11 12:35 PM

Thank you all so much for your replies! They really mean alot. This poem has been my baby for alittle while and I almost didn't post it because I was afraid I wouldn't get any feedback. Im glad I did.

WinterWren-
Counting stars wishing I was ok,
Crashing down was my biggest mistake.

HopelessRomanticGuy
Member

since 2001-08-17

Posts 495
LI, New York

6 posted 2004-10-30 03:11 AM

*grandious bow* Wow.. tying weather in like you do... amazing.. *drools* on a more serious note, I should really read these when I'm more awake than at 3 am. Still, with what capacity for comprehension I still possess, this poem was, well, awsome.

-Rich

Part of knowing where I'm going
is knowing where I've been
~Rich~

peachesNcream
Senior Member

since 2001-08-21

Posts 513
Ocean Of Tears

7 posted 2004-10-30 10:44 PM

As always, I applaud your work! Great job, this was a beautiful piece. ~Jess

"When the power of love overcomes the love of power the world will know peace." -Jimi Hendrix

~DreamChild~
Senior Member

since 2001-04-23

Posts 544
in your dreams

8 posted 2004-11-13 10:55 PM

this is haunting.

~Express Yourself~

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