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punkrockerrobin 
since 2001-05-15
Posts 1180Sparks, NV 
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this is my heart i'm taking from you you took it from me now i want it back you don't need it anymore you have someone else's heart to take so go away and leave me leave me here with my heart so i can give it to someone new someone who really loves me someone who really cares you can have your heart back when i stop loving you you may of stopped loving me but i will never stop loving you so goodbye to you and your love hi my name is robin and i am addicted to poetry and matt! |
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kissa~rachelle Senior Member
since 2003-11-27
Posts 988nowhere special |
well... i like the idea, but there wasnt really a good flow, or rhyme scheme. And it seemed like you repeated yourself a lot. I dunno, thats just how i saw it. Kissa I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling |
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punkrockerrobin
since 2001-05-15
Posts 1180Sparks, NV |
doesn't really have to have a flow most of my work doesn't. hi my name is robin and i am addicted to poetry and matt! |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
Yeah, the flow was off in some parts...but still! That isnt always what counts about a poem. I liked this alot Robin....keep posting!  ~Alli~ Happy Holidays! |
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