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TheGirlNoOneKnew
Member

since 2003-12-04

Posts 92
PA, USA

0 posted 2004-07-13 02:54 PM

Standing there in that never ending line,
I felt the rush of old high school memories
drip down deep into my veins,
like a hunter stalking its prey.
Know my place, realize the score
I always had to stand behind,
pretending I didn't want to be you
or part of your worshiped crowd.
Oh so popular and beautiful
you fit all the old cliches so well,
life handed you every high card
and left me to sort through the bottom.
I could never quite pinpoint
just why everyone loved you so much,
I could have been you if I wanted
if I wasn't trying so hard to be myself.
In another alternate reality,
maybe we could have even been friends,
maybe even confided in one another.
But in this world, nothing is fair
which is why you get to take the shortcuts
and I always end up last in line.

tapper798
Member

since 2003-07-20

Posts 353
My own world

1 posted 2004-07-13 06:28 PM

wow, awesome write. I completely understand what you're talking about and man that's just freakin awesome how you described it with such detail and yet using metaphores and such. wow great job.

Love is giving him the ability to break your heart...but trusting him enough to know he won't.

Stepharoo
Member

since 2004-05-04

Posts 149
Washington, USA

2 posted 2004-07-13 06:32 PM

Wow, This is so cool, its like your in my head. I feel this way about some one I know.
Awesome poem.
Keep it up!!!

TheGirlNoOneKnew
Member

since 2003-12-04

Posts 92
PA, USA

3 posted 2004-07-13 07:26 PM

Thanks for commenting guys, it really means alot to me. I wrote this about this girl I went to high school with. I saw her out one day and she had no idea who I was, which was basically a real slap in the face. But yeah, I'm glad you could relate to it.

*Alli4000*

Member Elite

since 2004-03-21

Posts 3188
The World of Poetry

4 posted 2004-07-23 08:02 PM

omg...wow...i am just left here totally speechless.
I can totally relate to this, and I'm sure that many other people can.
This was a great poem...really heatfelt...I love it...wow...

~Alli~

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

5 posted 2004-07-25 11:42 PM

good poem
pretty sad

you shouldn't take your place in this world and compare it to others. You are you, and its as simple as that.

Where ever you are....grammar school, highschool, college, work, life, home, where ever....... you're going to have to make a place for yourself ...for yourself.

not everyone will like you, and not every one will hate you.

the point is this: sometimes you're first in life, sometimes you're last. Sometimes you're caught up in the middle of things, and sometimes you just dont care and you do your own thing- regardless of the situation you should be happy being you.....cuz somtimes you're all you've got

I left my wallet in El Segundo...
And I gotta get it
I got got to get it!

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