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Ramblings Of A Searching Soul
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Ramblings Of A Searching Soul |
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CwboyAtHeart Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 541Selah, WA, USA 
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Wow. I haven't posted here in quite a while, I really miss it. I've had writers block since last November and it's very frustrating... I'm still struggling with it, and this one really isn't good at all, but it's the best I've written lately. It's about when I went to a church barbeque and to watch fireworks at a church like 215 miles away where I have some friends and I know the pastor and stuff. I had no idea who would be there... I ended up having an amazing time, and I don't think it could have been any better. Let me know what you think, please RAMBLINGS OF A SEARCHING SOUL It seemed too perfect already... Two-hundred-fifteen miles from home Just for a barbeque and foreworks A strange new place and I didn't get lost But wait! It gets better. There she sat... The girl I was hoping to see But really I had no idea if she'd show The talking, the laughter, the cathing up Good food, I think But honestly, I wasn't paying attention - To the food, that is. Sharing a blanket Sitting close, momentary bliss Despite the other two on the blanket Dark night, fireworks The night's tranquility... interrupted By spontaneous firework explosions Both figuratively inside of me (In my heart, between us) And in the night's rain-threatened sky Not knowing, yet What feelings she holds Locked within her... But seeing deep inside her mysterious eyes That yes, she holds a place for me. - C.K. Natland - |
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Lexy Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038California |
aawwww... I liked it. you should post. Even if you don't like it, you never know who will. |
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BrokenDreams Member
since 2003-02-09
Posts 425In The Clouds |
I really like this. I wish you the best of luck with this girl. Jen "The course of true love never did run smooth." -William Shakespeare |
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Stepharoo Member
since 2004-05-04
Posts 149Washington, USA |
Awww how cute. I love it! Keep posting. |
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*Belabebeautiful*
since 2003-01-03
Posts 696washington, USA |
sigh....such a hopeless romantic...like me!! Very well done I really liked the flow of the poem and the feelings behind the words. ~Live and Laugh~ Don't look to me for perfection for I will surely let you down. |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
Wow. I definatly agree with Lexy. You say that you didn't like this poem, but I sure did!  Anyways, I found some spelling errors in it such as "cathing-catching" and "foreworks-fireworks", but other than that, I absolutley loved this poem!  ~Alli~ I always knew looking back on the tears would make me laugh, but I never knew looking back on the laughter would make me cry. |
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