Teen Poetry #7 |
A Half Past Sundown |
young_blood Senior Member
since 2003-09-19
Posts 1115Indianapolis, IN |
here's my new lyrics, tell me what you think A Half Past Sundown The moon is drunk with the sun Just waiting to sober in the morn, And like a stream's faded uhm It sinks in the coming storm. The stars are desperate for friends Among the bruised in the sky, And blue never looked odd to them, Us who please all those brown eyes. But heaven is lost When we unleash this hell. Forgetting the cost And how many times we fell. So bleak among the meek that stand When all around stare at the ground, But you fight on. Bloodied by the white eyed hand That screamed when the fight grew loud, But you stay strong. But heaven is lost When we unleash this hell. Forgetting the cost And how many times we fell. Our crowns cast low From these unworthy brows, Put aside what we know And bleed from our mouths. now im alone, but not lonely like before |
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Stepharoo Member
since 2004-05-04
Posts 149Washington, USA |
I really like it a lot. I really do like all your work. Keep it up!!! |
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young_blood Senior Member
since 2003-09-19
Posts 1115Indianapolis, IN |
thanks steph. this is a new song written for my band. now im alone, but not lonely like before |
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Stepharoo Member
since 2004-05-04
Posts 149Washington, USA |
Anytime anytime. What kinda of band are you in? Cause thats really cool! |
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young_blood Senior Member
since 2003-09-19
Posts 1115Indianapolis, IN |
well, I'm in an acoustic band. We are kinda emo, but at the same time we have a lot of more poppy stuff. We are pretty unique. |
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Stepharoo Member
since 2004-05-04
Posts 149Washington, USA |
Thats cool! I have been asked to play bass in a band once. I turned them down cause I dont know how to play bass, yet. Your band sounds very interesting, lol. But I'm sure you are probably pretty good. Keep up the writing! |
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A.L Member
since 2003-03-15
Posts 131 |
cool lyrics...what kind of music do you play? |
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Sweetest Sorrow X Member
since 2004-01-19
Posts 146From a cradle to a casket |
Thats Awesome..whats your bands name? I hope your sleeping good at nights.... |
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young_blood Senior Member
since 2003-09-19
Posts 1115Indianapolis, IN |
my bands name is April's Falling, but we might change it to Other-End-of-Nowhere |
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young_blood Senior Member
since 2003-09-19
Posts 1115Indianapolis, IN |
thank you everyone for the comments, please check out my other stuff too! thanks. |
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ambivalence Junior Member
since 2006-07-13
Posts 15Canada |
I'm becoming a fan. |
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tearsoflove13762 Member
since 2004-09-05
Posts 488Texas.. and yes i have an accent |
i love the lyrics and i like april's falling but most bands i have followed got bigger after a name change for some reason... i dunno i like the lyrics though i love reading your stuff |
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M e m o r i e s Junior Member
since 2006-07-15
Posts 14Alaska, USA |
*fangirl squeal* A BAND! I love bands! And your lyrics! z0mg they are sssooo good! Me wuf! I can't wait to buy your CD! ^^ Here is a good luck cookie for you! *gives cookie* |
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oh_my_goshijustgotexcited Member
since 2006-07-12
Posts 52USA, IDAHO |
The stars are desperate for friends Among the bruised in the sky, And blue never looked odd to them, Us who please all those brown eyes very very powerful good job. i love reading your work because i can tell you absolutely love what you do.. you are a very talented writer. thanks for sharing! Viola |
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