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Teen Poetry #7

starry night

Ender
Member

since 1999-12-08

Posts 200
Yuma, AZ USA

0 posted 2004-06-09 11:31 PM

Sleep descends upon the city
The gloom of the night
Only to be dimly lighten by the moon
The streets are bare
The homes with no eyes
Nothing moves
Except the leaves with the wind
Which howls a warning
To not venture outside
In this dark, gloomy night
You sleep in comfort knowing
The one you love is there
Next to you
There to protect you
Keep you safe
From any harm that may come

tapper798
Member

since 2003-07-20

Posts 353
My own world

1 posted 2004-06-23 03:10 PM

I don't get why no one replied to this one, I loved it. I wish I could put that feeling into words like you did. I liked the last part about the wind's warning and leading up to your loved one being there safe inside and able to protect you. I loved it.

Love is giving him the ability to break your heart...but trusting him enough to know he won't.

Stepharoo
Member

since 2004-05-04

Posts 149
Washington, USA

2 posted 2004-06-24 02:06 AM

I really really like this one...I just like the emotion I can feel coming out of it. Well written!
Keep it up.

fearing-laughter
Senior Member

since 2001-04-24

Posts 605
land of cheese (Wisconsin)

3 posted 2004-06-25 03:48 AM

weird..it starts out kinda depressing then it gets lovey. i like it, very interesting. keep posting
bergundy

"Be who you want and do what you will, in the end those who matter won't mind, and those who mind won't matter." -Dr Suess- (a brilliant man)

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