Teen Poetry #7 |
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A mind at war |
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*Belabebeautiful*![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2003-01-03
Posts 696washington, USA |
So I sat down and wrote this whole thing in about .2 seconds. Its horrible the flow is off it all around needs some work, BUT it is a big huge rant that I just need to get off of my chest. I won! I won! Oh isn’t it wonderful He’s mine and not hers, he came back And he wants me dammit! Who cares about the rest? You won? Really? So the jerk who strangled your soul And shattered your heart Found out the hard way that you were the best And instead of kicking him aside like you should have done, You proved to him that he can walk over your spirit and get away with it No, it’s not like that! He loves me! He misses me and he wants me back I am the one his heart calls out for I am the one he is suppose to be with forever Forever huh? Or maybe just until the next “evil one” comes along Well he has it good here but could it be even better there? What if? He told me there were no more “what if’s”! He promised me that he had finally figured it out That I was his true love and that even if I didn’t believe him, He would prove to me that I’m priceless Priceless? Or Worthless? He promised? How can you be so naive? You know what he did to you, you know how he hurt you I also know how happy he makes me How he can light up my life with just a smile How without him near me I feel miserable And feel like my life is worth nothing You can’t take him back, you can’t trust him But I love him, love conquers all in the end He will prove to me eventually that I am who he needs No, he wont, he’ll hurt you again Yes, he will, I can see it in his eyes Eyes can be deceiving, he won’t He will! He wont! Yes! No! ….All things will be known in time and then we’ll see who is right My head or my heart… The nice thing about being a pesimest is that your either right, or pleasantly surprised. |
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Ringo![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2003-02-20
Posts 3684Saluting with misty eyes |
Bella- The dichotomy of head vs. heart is very well done, and this subject is something that we all deal with at one time or another (and another and another...) Great job... even with the "terrible flow", and the "work" you feel it needs. (HINT- It's always better than you might think) If it's true that we are here to help others, then what exactly are the others here for? |
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*Belabebeautiful*![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2003-01-03
Posts 696washington, USA |
heh, thank you. ~Live and Laugh~ The nice thing about being a pesimest is that your either right, or pleasantly surprised. |
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WinterWren Senior Member
since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044...Coming to |
I really really love this! I could really feel what you're going to. Maybe partly because I've been in a similar situation, but Im sure other people can feel the emotion too. Very powerful and sad. I especially love the 7th stanza. Thanks for sharing. W.W. |
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sweet_cute_palestinian04 Member
since 2004-04-11
Posts 418Earth |
wow...good poem keep it uppp |
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*Alli4000*![]()
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
I LOVE it!!!! |
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Censored Member
since 2004-04-11
Posts 86 |
I love the back and forth-ness of it, lol. ![]() |
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