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Teen Poetry #7

Breathing Closer to You

young_blood
Senior Member

since 2003-09-19

Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN

0 posted 2004-04-26 04:21 PM

yet another one that has a different form of poetry
tell me what you think

Breathing Closer to You

She cries tonight

                     n

                     s

                     i

                     d

                     e,

Through the lines

                      i

                      n

                      king

the tears hidden in twilight

                            n

                            to

Bowls beneath her nose.

Stream deep into windows

            These three letters

Spelling names of those who stand.

            Burn wax figurines

Only miniature Icarus’

            In the whittling away of the light,

Makes ice cold dreams

            But don’t let the fire sounds fade.

The last kiss (your first) is still remembered two days later,

So those tears long for another. Too tired to turn and look

At smiling figures that melt in your mind. They roll around

And call you to do the same. You just missed your chance

For another. (I missed it too.)

now im alone, but not lonely like before

[This message has been edited by young_blood (04-26-2004 09:25 PM).]

*Alli4000*

Member Elite

since 2004-03-21

Posts 3188
The World of Poetry

1 posted 2004-04-26 06:26 PM

No offense or anything...but I was kinda confused.

young_blood
Senior Member

since 2003-09-19

Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN

2 posted 2004-04-26 09:26 PM

ya sorry, the letters were all ou of alignment. now it will read ok. all the letters that go down spell their own words starting with the letter in the word from the phrase.

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