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Constructs of the mind (no builder accredited)

young_blood
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since 2003-09-19

Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN

0 posted 2004-04-19 11:15 AM

Constructs of the mind (no builder accredited)

The night glistens off a lake's water
As the ground sweats nocturnal creatures,
But no one hears dreams falter
As the paradoxal equinox becomes the feature.

Can you see the insects glisten?
How do chills feel during a heat wave in the summer?
You can whisper to those who listen (quiet crickets)
But it will never ease the searching, single hunger.

Go ahead and stare into your bedroom lights
And try to block my face from the walls painted with my name,
But the ceiling only stares back into your eyes;
So soak the walls with rubbing alcohol and set it those letters aflame.

Warm yourself in that oven;
Enjoy that burning...burning desire for my lips.
The reflections have not been proven,
Feel free to breathe deeply into this. (the ending game)

A scent as faint as love
Shimmers across your nostril's with a flare,
But this rose-colored glove
Could be the start of a deep, subtle despair.

You can envision my eyes in another's blues
Glaring, ever-daring across the room of chances;
Did you ever think once that you would lose
Or was it a copy of great 21st century romances?

Wake up from your golden nightmare...

now im alone, but not lonely like before

kissa~rachelle
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since 2003-11-27

Posts 988
nowhere special

1 posted 2004-04-19 10:28 PM

wow... amazing. The imagery was awesome.

I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling

anya
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since 2002-07-27

Posts 393
London, UK

2 posted 2004-04-20 04:35 PM

liked this very much, the imagery you create is vivid and well constructed, a good write!

*Alli4000*

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since 2004-03-21

Posts 3188
The World of Poetry

3 posted 2004-04-21 06:02 PM

dido. awesome describing!!!!

~Alli~

young_blood
Senior Member

since 2003-09-19

Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN

4 posted 2004-04-25 01:25 PM

thanks all. imagery is my thing (if you cant tell)

TigerZ
Member

since 2002-01-02

Posts 83
Ontario, Canada

5 posted 2004-04-28 06:04 AM

Another great write. Thank you so much for sharing, and yes, imagery is definitely your thing. Beautiful imagery in this piece.

A life without love…is no life at all.

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