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Teen Poetry #7

Of All The...

*Alli4000*

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since 2004-03-21

Posts 3188
The World of Poetry

0 posted 2004-04-16 08:10 PM

(This is just a rough draft. Don't know if it's any good.)

OF ALL THE...

Of all the times you made me cry,
And all the times you said you’d try.

Of all the things I’ve heard you say,
My favorite is: “I’ll love you each and every day.”

Of all the places that we have went,
And all the money that we have spent.

Of all the times you held me tight,
And every time you kissed me goodnight.

Of all the things you’ve gotten me,
Our love is the best gift that I could receive.

Of all the times I wore a frown,
And you went and turned it upside-down.

Of all the places I could be…
I don’t care as long as you’re here with me.

Thanks for reading!

SEA

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1 posted 2004-04-17 12:26 PM

this is so great! Doesn't need to be a rough draft....I think this is pretty polished

kissa~rachelle
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since 2003-11-27

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nowhere special

2 posted 2004-04-17 01:48 AM

dido. I loved this. The rhyming was amazing. Ususally i'm not much for poems that rhyme, because they sound fake, cuz poeple force the rhymes too much, but this was amazing. Loved it.

I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling

a123
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since 2004-03-27

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3 posted 2004-04-17 05:17 AM

Ya this was gr8

i liked the line..of all the times i wore a frown, and u went and turned it upside down..

simply gr8!

a123

*Alli4000*

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since 2004-03-21

Posts 3188
The World of Poetry

4 posted 2004-04-17 02:36 PM

Thanks for the comments. I appreciate it that you took the time to read my poem, glad you all liked it!!

~Alli~

Fleur
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since 2004-04-09

Posts 103

5 posted 2004-04-20 09:52 AM

This poem was so sweet! very cute... nice job...

*Alli4000*

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since 2004-03-21

Posts 3188
The World of Poetry

6 posted 2004-04-21 05:53 PM

Thanks Fleur. I'm always glad to know that you liked my poem and that you took the time to comment on it.

~Alli~

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