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Teen Poetry #7

Save me, or save yourself...

Sweetest Sorrow X
Member

since 2004-01-19

Posts 146
From a cradle to a casket

0 posted 2004-08-27 04:12 PM

Smiling, one indisgression
and letting out one huge confession.

Can it be true?
Can everybody hide it?
Can everybody fight it, like you?

You're a liar.
Such a liar.
Such an idol to people like me.
I understand the philosophy.

The truth is so important.
And if the only one who knows it is you,
Than you are so important.
Honesty is left only for the weak.

Let no one know.
Tell no one.
Burn it before it sells.

I believe that lovers should be tied together and thrown into the ocean in the worst of weather and left there to drownin their innocence

blackandwhitehorizon
Member

since 2003-05-05

Posts 183
an akward state of mind

1 posted 2004-08-27 07:55 PM

I can't say that i know where you're coming from behind this but I love how it flows. You did a great job at writing it...

Such a liar.
Such an idol to people like me.
...i like how you can say that

"love is but a song we sing and fear's the way we die"

electricxheart
Member

since 2004-09-05

Posts 184
far away from home.

2 posted 2004-09-16 05:39 PM

there was something about this
i really liked. it captivated
me in some sense.

i liked it, keep writing.

kelly.

so, while the sun sets on another
day; i'm waiting for those words
that make me stay.

PoeTik JusTice
Member

since 2003-01-05

Posts 186
California, USA

3 posted 2004-09-16 05:58 PM

great write, something about it was very intriguing! adding to my library!

XoXo Love Alwayz XoXo
*~Serena~*
"The greatest thing you'll ever learn, is just to love, and be loved in return." --Moulin Rouge

Lexy
Senior Member

since 2003-01-28

Posts 1038
California

4 posted 2004-09-19 12:05 PM

this is extrodinary.
the last line. was like: woah.
this is greatly protrayed...in so few lines.
so much was said.
I admire that ability

thinktwice
Member

since 2003-12-23

Posts 125
United States

5 posted 2004-09-20 12:21 PM

i rarely comment on stuff i read here. this caught my eye. i like poetry that makes me think twice. i gave it a second read.

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