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yv Senior Member
since 2003-05-30
Posts 574 |
This is something that I wrote in my Pre-cal class...lost in my own world of sorrow and teenage seduction with the boy who got away... When I'll look back on my life I'll see two things 1) I loved then lost Which in my eyes Is the same as not loving at all Because reciprication is not What you receive It's what you wish 2) I doubted everyday of my life I doubt that my life meant much I couldn't please myself And therefore Couldn't please anybody else So... Goodbye "And as she floats away Into the oblivion of the minds Of nobody She thinks 'Is it real? Or is fear an illusion Which I escape To avoid reality?'" Yv-Goddess of Her Domain. Symbol of Truth Passion Pain. Let Her Smile Rain on the Hearts of the Innocent. |
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darkness_witch Senior Member
since 2003-12-03
Posts 516Underneath |
this poem was really sad to read. i loved the end. not really sure wat to say because i have no criticism that would improve this. thnk you for the reply to my poem. i really appreciate wat u sed. hope to see sum more of ur work round here loveandempathy darkness nirvana means freedom from pain, suffering and the external world. |
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spritrider87 Member
since 2003-05-31
Posts 294NH |
hey this was really good. "I doubt that my life meant much I couldn't please myself And therefore Couldn't please anybody else So... Goodbye" you pleased me. dont leave ok. dont konw what i'll do if you do. "I am the bringer of darkness. A shadow in the dark. I prey on the. The child of the lost souls. I hunger for the love of one unknown. The one to reve |
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spritrider87 Member
since 2003-05-31
Posts 294NH |
yeah the homepage thing was written wrong but here is how you can get to my home page people and my website. http://www.geocities.com/spritrider87/IknowWhatyoueThinking.html yv you better show up somewhere because i am about ready to start looking for you even if i have to walk all the way to your house wich would mean walking the whole state of south carolina. lost and afraid i am calling out to you light angel. |
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