Dark Poetry #4 |
Bitter Winds |
Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
I was experimenting with the depths of depression. This does not represent my present psyche, okay? Bitter Winds Something deep within speaks to me Not words of comfort or silence But sharp commands of discontent They are as the bitter winds Sweeping as a torrent Through the deepened valleys Of my battered psyche Bending and breaking my thoughts as they pass And I feel my soul slip and sway Leaning and contorting In grotesque fashion Till all resilience seems to be worn Small fissures deepening Fracturing even the very core of me And I feel as if I shall shatter Beneath this relentless onslaught Pieces of me caught upon the winds As they swirl into madness Rising in column To blend with sky And I am in the storm This whirlwind of emotion Until I am swept Into the eye of Insanity Where all is quelled Save the voices in my head Which whisper now In the language of despair S.A.T. The whole of the Universe resides within each individual heart. |
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Savage Quiescence Member
since 2002-07-29
Posts 326Wandering |
Good flow, emotion, structure and imagery. It only would have been nice to know the source of the written torment. Thanks for sharing. Keep writing. |
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Sweetest Sorrow X Member
since 2004-01-19
Posts 146From a cradle to a casket |
So good.....I like it a lot..hit something inside me. Thanks <3 Persephone You better count your lucky stars that everything I wish for..doesnt come true |
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Theory Junior Member
since 2004-05-04
Posts 23N. CA. USA |
"And I feel as if I shall shatter Beneath this relentless onslaught Pieces of me caught upon the winds As they swirl into madness Rising in column To blend with sky" this is great. enjoyed |
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PKreturns Member
since 2003-07-21
Posts 362New Orleans, LA |
This is good. Good experimenting...you should give in to the dark side more...(darth vader voice) |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Rising in column To blend with sky And I am in the storm This whirlwind of emotion Until I am swept Into the eye of Insanity Where all is quelled Save the voices in my head Which whisper now In the language of despair''' ~ Susan~ you express yourself well! never doubt that I can so relate to this....hugsss There's a place I like to hide-open your mind to me-Visualise your dream- Record it in the present tense, I am smiling next to you, in silent lucidity |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Thank you all for your comments, I appreciate them greatly. susan Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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