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Dark Poetry #4

prayer of the lost

River
Senior Member

since 2003-09-16

Posts 627
my own little world

0 posted 2004-05-20 04:13 PM

hate this burns and echoes
past confusion
pitiful lives at waste for nothing
smashing guilt at mistakes
faster than I can breath
I think I see a light
but it is so far away
so dim i wonder if it's just another
hallucination meant to mock me
cold hearted I can't just sit here
and watch it disappear
I need to strive for something
or else i die like the rest
die like the rest
I doubt it's the best
inside I feel sick and confused
outside i feel something like used
helpless and battered
do I have the strength to run
oh my God please help me
I won't make it alone.

Running out of pain

Theory
Junior Member

since 2004-05-04

Posts 23
N. CA. USA

1 posted 2004-05-20 08:16 PM

I hear madness and chaos in this prayer. someone desperate at the end of their rope. nice. I liked it

darkness_witch
Senior Member

since 2003-12-03

Posts 516
Underneath

2 posted 2004-05-21 02:29 AM

this is amazing

i can empathise with wat ur feeling. its sad to see sum1 feeling how i do, and im sorry that you feel like this.

this is a trully amazing poem, packed with emotions and thoughts, its great that u can express all of them.

keep them coming, i love to read ur poems.

hardcore write dude

darkness

nirvana means freedom from pain, suffering and the external world.

Endlessecho
Member

since 2003-09-05

Posts 398
I live within myself

3 posted 2004-05-21 07:57 AM

This has a really great flow to it. I really like the last line. Great peice.

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