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Endlessecho Member
since 2003-09-05
Posts 398I live within myself |
My father reaches over to turn off the oxygen machine so that he can light another cigarette. I place his food in front of him; the same old food as always. I leave the room because I cannot stand the smell of smoke and boredom and ending life. |
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sweet_cute_palestinian04 Member
since 2004-04-11
Posts 418Earth |
this poem was kinda good ,,,i did not understand it much but it sounded good keep it upp. I will cover you with my blood,not only because |
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Theory Junior Member
since 2004-05-04
Posts 23N. CA. USA |
This is someone who's father is suffering from some kind of cancer. possibly lung. that's what the oxygen machine is all about. they're helping to feed and take care of them during this tough time and the father is still smoking cigarretes even though suffering through cancer. That's got to be tough for the son or daughter to have to deal with. I liked the ending to your poem. very strong.hoped this helped palestinian04 |
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a123 Member
since 2004-03-27
Posts 72 |
wow. this was powerful.I liked it a123 |
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Endlessecho Member
since 2003-09-05
Posts 398I live within myself |
Thank you so much Theory! Couldn't have said it better myself :-) And thank you all for your comments. |
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River Senior Member
since 2003-09-16
Posts 627my own little world |
hey, the words in this made me think, it's sad yes, but as a poem I don't think it had much to it. it seems more like a statement than a poem, you know? other than that it's fine. I'm sorry about your dad. - River Running out of pain |
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