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Broken World (one of my favorites)
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Broken World (one of my favorites) |
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Darker Season Junior Member
since 2004-04-01
Posts 48Wisconsin |
Broken World Life was going good without a single cloud in sight This mother of three children thought that she had won the fight She treasured every moment, not a second went to waste But on her yearly checkup all her comfort was erased She thought that her recovery was on the healthy track But the doctor softly whispered that her cancer had come back When someone's life is torn apart It's more than just a broken heart It's broken dreams and broken hope And there's no real way to cope... Inside this Broken World A homeless man was starving as he sat along the street He begged a thousand strangers for a simple meal to eat There was no need for miracles to help this old man live A small part of their dinner would be all they'd need to give But no one ever offered him some food off of their plate And no one knew how much it meant until it was too late When someone's life is torn apart It's more than just a broken heart It's broken dreams and broken hope And there's no real way to cope... Inside this Broken World With just a simple kiss goodnight she thought her date was done But in her boyfriends twisted mind, the night had just begun No one else was in the room and he could not resist He told her that he wanted more and grabbed her by the wrist And though she had the self-respect to firmly to him "no" All her innocence was robbed before he let her go When someone's life is torn apart It's more than just a broken heart It's broken dreams and broken hope And there's no real way to cope... Inside this Broken World Four high school kids were out one night and it was getting late It was their final week of school before they'd graduate And everyone was laughing as they cruised the avenue But suddenly a stranger's truck came rushing into view And it's too bad that none of them will end their senior year This driver racing towards them had been drinking too much beer When someone's life is torn apart It's more than just a broken heart It's broken dreams and broken hope And there's no real way to cope... Inside this Broken World A man was always faithful and devoted to his wife And he was truly happy with this woman in his life But though his love for her was always genuine and true She was not as loyal. She had found somebody new Then breaking every wedding vow, she left with no remorse Destroying her old marriage when she filed for divorce When someone's life is torn apart It's more than just a broken heart It's broken dreams and broken hope And there's no real way to cope... Inside this Broken World A teenage boy walks up the stairs and locks his bedroom door He's sick of being lonely. He can't take it anymore The tears start coming slowly as he sits down on his bed He looks into the mirror and puts a gun up to his head And leaving one small note that said "I'll miss you Mom and Dad" This boy has just become the friend that no one ever had When someone's life is torn apart It's more than just a broken heart It's broken dreams and broken hope And there's no real way to cope... But open up your broken eyes It's a small world after all And you might be the next to fall... Inside this Broken World |
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click1 Member
since 2003-03-25
Posts 152usa |
WOW! well done...I don't know what to say..but wow... Click |
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toxic_outroar New Member
since 2004-03-22
Posts 6 |
i've never been a fan of a long poem, but i think this one just changed my view on that. really meaningful and touching. at some stage in our lives we are all welcomed to the real world... it aint a pretty site |
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Vagabond Member
since 2004-01-23
Posts 163 |
I love it!!!! Very good, great. Write more like that if you can, i hope my side of this place gets fixed and i can us the fourm better. Good luck Vagabon the Lost One |
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kissa~rachelle Senior Member
since 2003-11-27
Posts 988nowhere special |
oh wow. This was... beautiful. I cryed. Literally. This has to be one of the best poems i have ever read. It was so completely... AMAZING!! I'm adding this 2 my library... if thats okay with you. I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling |
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Hollow_Emptiness Senior Member
since 2004-02-01
Posts 715New Zealand |
Whoa "Why are my visions so unliving with dreams? And why do I no longer care?" - Stygian |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Outstanding... "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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Spine Grinder Senior Member
since 2000-10-28
Posts 1127Standing In Silence... |
 this was sooooooo AWESOME! Great great great job!!!!! holy crap....."I...I bleed...For no one..but myself...For me and no one else!"~ MudVaYne |
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*Inque Monroe* Junior Member
since 2003-10-18
Posts 43No where special |
Wow...thats amazing, it brought tears to my eyes. Absolutly brillant. What does it matter, we will all die in the end anyway. |
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Annie Shadow Junior Member
since 2004-05-02
Posts 27Drifting |
This was truly amazing. What an important and touching piece of writing you have created...amazing!!! |
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alibaster Member
since 2001-07-07
Posts 299In my own private hell...(PA). |
Ummmm, oooo my, I am speechless and that doesn't happen to me very often. WOW!! Impressed, simpley amazing! This hit home with me for many reasons I could never explain---but one is that a 17 year old girl that went to school with my daughter hung herself 5 days ago.... MY GODS PPL, "OPEN your Broken EYES".... PLease!! "There is an alter ego which dwells within every soul."(C)alibaster "If it doesn't bite, scratch, and make you bleed it isn't worth it" (C) alibas |
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Destinys_Fallen_Angel Member
since 2004-05-06
Posts 75Boise Idaho |
WOW WOW WOW...this poem is amazing..ive read alot of poems and its amazing...it tells it just how life is and how cruel and hard it can be...its amazing.. Yahoo messenger: destinys_Falen_Angel |
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ZM Synerus New Member
since 2004-05-06
Posts 2Vermont |
::Picks up jaw:: Wow. This is AMAZING. It really hits upon issues today that not enough people think about. This is very well done and I especially like how changed the flow of it for the very end. Don't know where your musical interests lay, but have you considered turning this into a song at all? Incredible job. *~Z~* "Silence is the loudest parting word you never say." - Ben Harper |
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Destinys_Fallen_Angel Member
since 2004-05-06
Posts 75Boise Idaho |
i read this for the 3rd time today and it never stops to amaze me, it is so true of how life is today and how much people are hurting and how in this world there are so many who fail to see what others are going through, i saw a homeless guy today and i thought about this poem...it made me stop and help him out a bit...there are so many in this world who are hurting and they just need a friend...thank you for writing this amazing poem.... Yahoo messenger: destinys_Falen_Angel |
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Triskaidekaphobia Member
since 2003-02-05
Posts 251In a state of disrepair... |
This is truly excellent! I haven't been on here for over a year but this is excellent stuff to come back to. I don't know what it is excatly but it seems to remind me of Philip Larkin's This Be The Verse... Again excellent "And the sun went down, and the stars came out far over the summer sea, |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I'm in awe |
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Annie Shadow Junior Member
since 2004-05-02
Posts 27Drifting |
Hey...I was looking through some of my favorite poems and I just stumbled across this old one of yours, Andrew, and being so touched by it once again, I decided to give it a final ride at the top. This song still leaves me speechless! |
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