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kissa~rachelle
Senior Member

since 2003-11-27

Posts 988
nowhere special

0 posted 2004-04-01 04:41 PM

The crying stops
followed with this hollow,
empty feeling.
I'm surprised i can feel anything,
seeing as how you feel with your heart,
and you ripped mine out,
as i watched helpessly.
Watching the blood spill
as you break it in half.
You thought he tears
were because you hit me,
but my arm wasnt what was hurting.
My heart was,
but you wouldnt know,
or care.
I'm tired of watching you hurt me,
sometimes i dont feel anything,
and it scares me.
I wish i could say
I was through loving you,but i still do,
even after all you've put me through.
I find myself staying up late,
thinking about you.
Your cute little smile,
your BIG broon eyes,
the way when you hug me,
i dont want to let go.
Then i remember,
the way you hurt me,
and it makes me want
to let go of you.
Forever.

I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling

click1
Member

since 2003-03-25

Posts 152
usa

1 posted 2004-04-01 10:36 PM

Nice job! it looks good on the page, I liked it..

Click

eor
Senior Member

since 2002-09-26

Posts 959
blues & greys

2 posted 2004-04-03 06:45 AM

"Watching the blood spill
as you break it in half.
You thought he tears
were because you hit me,
but my arm wasnt what was hurting.
My heart was,
but you wouldnt know,
or care."

beautiful lines...

"So what befalls the flawless?
Look what I've built, it shines so beautifully now watch as it destroys me."

River
Senior Member

since 2003-09-16

Posts 627
my own little world

3 posted 2004-04-03 07:11 AM

oh i agree with eor, nice job! very smooth write.

- River

sleep my precious slumber

Paragon
Member

since 2003-02-16

Posts 114

4 posted 2004-04-03 06:33 PM

ignorance on the behalf of those whom we are considerate for is often found in relationships. Yet there is hope, for there are others who go through the same things both male and female. Well done here, I thoroughly enjoyed this read.

kissa~rachelle
Senior Member

since 2003-11-27

Posts 988
nowhere special

5 posted 2004-04-03 08:42 PM

thanks, i'm glad someone understands. I appreciate the comments.

*Inque Monroe*
Junior Member

since 2003-10-18

Posts 43
No where special

6 posted 2004-04-04 10:01 PM

Really good, sounds alot like one of mine also called numb on here lol ^_^ Really good.

toxic_outroar
New Member

since 2004-03-22

Posts 6

7 posted 2004-04-06 12:51 PM

... i feel for this poem

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