»
Archives
»
Dark Poetry #4
»
Unstable
| Dark Poetry #4 |
|
Unstable |
|
|
Lexy Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038California |
it's really not enough, I will cry until I bleed if I need to. Unstable... mentally. A fog, and I see the outline of your body. Your tears are producing this mist I walk between. I will hold your hand and not worry about tommorow, or how the numbers will leave my heart sunburnt. I hope that time will give me a childish glow, instead of a glass shattering scream. A scream for this comfort, I can never seem to get. Please come and hold my heart, even if its lightly. I think that it could keep me from falling. I don't expect happiness or despair. I am a selfless slave to your blue eyes. Come and wrap me up into your arms. I know your afraid your thorns will cut me, but they will only make me kiss you harder. Bruise me. I'd rather be a rainbow, then a shadow produced by your hand. Hand puppets with fangs, up on your ceiling. The pain continues to enthrall me. An oil rainbow on the asphalt, run over and over. But if you look at me from that certain angle, I still shine. Because of the light from your beautiful blue eyes. |
||
| © Copyright 2004 Alexis Smith - All Rights Reserved | |||
|
darkness_witch Senior Member
since 2003-12-03
Posts 516Underneath |
oh wow. this is fantastic. i felt my heartbreak as i read this. i felt my whole body melt. is is beautiful, sad, yet beuaitful. extraordinary. as i read it i could hear a sad piano ensemble playing as an soundtrack to it! i would say my usual keep rockin but it dusnt fit this. well done. darkness You can always hear a tear in Cobain's voice, the pain going on there is always visible through his lyrics - Marilon Manson |
||
|
River Senior Member
since 2003-09-16
Posts 627my own little world |
*is frozen with shock, barely unable to speak, eyes are bulging, and is extremely happy to have read such a gripping poem!!!* ...this is breathtaking Lexy, i really really really like it, lol. the imagery is awesome...this would be one of my fave parts: "I know your afraid your thorns will cut me, but they will only make me kiss you harder"...lol, groovy groovy gravy!!! rok on. =) - River sleep my precious slumber |
||
|
silhouetted Senior Member
since 2004-01-30
Posts 537New Zealand |
it was going one way, then the next it was going somewhere else i wrote one like this a bit of a while ago called Golden eyes, but i must say ur poem is beta i really liked that part too river that line really really caught me anfd i thought wat a great writer u are!!!! KEEP IT UP LOR "They'll love you just the way you are, if your perfect" - Alanis Morisette |
||
|
kissa~rachelle Senior Member
since 2003-11-27
Posts 988nowhere special |
I like the ending, it was awesome. This was really sad, but really amzing and wonderful at the same time. ~Vampire Kisses  I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling |
||
|
|
⇧ top of page ⇧ |
|
| All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format. | ||
