Dark Poetry #4 |
Faded Photograph |
Hollow_Emptiness Senior Member
since 2004-02-01
Posts 715New Zealand |
Patches of grey, Amongst the black and white, But can anyone see the red? The red hot anger in your eyes, I'm fragile take caution, Handle with care, I'm packaged up in boxes, Because of the cracks that ive attached, I know you feel my desperation, And i can see you watch my pain, But your hands are limp and your shoulders burnt, With the tears that boil on my face, I look at you again, The red hot anger in your eyes, I turn my face away, And grip my hands tightly together, Because in my withered hand I hold, A faded photograph I linger in the shadows, I breathe when I see you. |
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darkness_witch Senior Member
since 2003-12-03
Posts 516Underneath |
hey i like this one! love the boxes part hehehehe I can just see old ags holding the photo in her withered hand! LOLOLOL hehehe sry im not online, doing homework but just thought I better see wats happening! keep them coming dude yaknow ill neva stop reading them! darkness You can always hear a tear in Cobain's voice, the pain going on there is always visible through his lyrics - Marilon Manson |
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silhouetted Senior Member
since 2004-01-30
Posts 537New Zealand |
nice mate lol me and soph went on habbo last nite!!! such a crack up lol see u soooon byebye Silhouetted by Deception |
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River Senior Member
since 2003-09-16
Posts 627my own little world |
wow, this is awesome! i'm speechless now =) great job. - River sleep my precious slumber |
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Grover Senior Member
since 2004-01-27
Posts 1967London, ON, Canada |
Very good! Grover. |
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kissa~rachelle Senior Member
since 2003-11-27
Posts 988nowhere special |
"I know you feel my desperation, And i can see you watch my pain, But your hands are limp and your shoulders burnt, With the tears that boil on my face," Very nice. I like this. This part of the poem was the part that stood out to me the most. ~Vampire Kisses I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling |
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Paper Tiger Member
since 2003-09-28
Posts 77 |
I liked it. Great imagery! |
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