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Tomer
Senior Member

since 2002-06-28

Posts 1168
Michigan

0 posted 2004-12-20 03:52 AM

Kings were on lakes,
Like magicians flying,
Swiftly defying the wholesome slender.

I glanced through pyramids,
Seeing truth riding unicorns,
Changing the rate of my smile.

I live life under my breath,
Wishing for wings that cant carry my soul,
Seeing smiles go in miles as my head turns.

I want to realize the inventions,
On the ground for me to borrow,
Instead of stealing something I cant return.

There isn’t a painting I can love,
Until I love mirrors,
That can hold gold with each canyon they fold in.

I want to remember the sun,
Instead of tasting sorrow wine.
Splashing my insides with feverish chaos.

The running of cycles,
Leaving the terrains I classically played music in,
To sit in a room with colors of white solitude.

I live my reality in dreams,
Fearing the consequences of what my heart truly wants,
Seeing my vision like my religion in the practice field of this kingdom.

I wish to fall in love,
but my future of indecision remains my greatest fall.

I want to converse with her smile,
Then touch her fingers of soft innocence,
To believe in myself, that’s where I must go.

green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member

since 2003-06-26

Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx

1 posted 2004-12-22 02:02 AM

You would love to hear comments. Well your poem is truly beautiful. I love being a Christian. So I can look at poems like this and do my best to see it as Jesus himself would see it. Its so beautiful. It makes me think of the word "Free."

-GIS

My guitar's name is Jennifer.

Lexy
Senior Member

since 2003-01-28

Posts 1038
California

2 posted 2004-12-22 09:27 AM

I've read this about four times now on different days. I just love coming back and reading it. I love how it starts out. Every line says something amazing.
This is amazing.

mysticpoe
Senior Member

since 2003-02-28

Posts 883

3 posted 2004-12-22 10:16 AM

Great job here Tomer, originality abounds. great job.

If nothing is something
then everything is
our thoughts and feelings
and all that exists.

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

4 posted 2004-12-22 11:42 AM

'I live my reality in dreams,
Fearing the consequences of what my heart truly wants,
Seeing my vision like my religion in the practice field of this kingdom.

I wish to fall in love,
but my future of indecision remains my greatest fall.

I want to converse with her smile,
Then touch her fingers of soft innocence,
To believe in myself, that’s where I must go"

ah...yes, I am keeping this one. Out freakin' standing!

::::brushing off the seat in my mind for you:::

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

5 posted 2004-12-22 01:03 PM

A beautifully written piece of work, and many thoughts left for one to ponder. The "what if" in it is wonderful, and the indecision makes you want to solve any problem found. Nicely done.

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