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darkness_witch
Senior Member

since 2003-12-03

Posts 516
Underneath

0 posted 2004-01-28 11:55 PM

Whenever I scream
Its you I hear
Whenever I spin out
Its you I fear
Whenever I toy with fire
Its you I sear
Whenever Im cold
Its you Im near
Whenever I am controlled
Its you who is my edir

Whenever I do stand
Its you that makes me fall
Whenever I feel good
Its you that makes me small
Whenever I feel high
Its you that is my downfall

Why do you do this
Is it that you want to see me fail
Fail like you did

These complicated questions
Take up all the empty space inside me
Complicated questions
Never did you any justice
Anyway

Please answer, I'm calling just to find out if you could be there for me when I crack - finger 11

Gothika_07
Member

since 2004-01-15

Posts 61
new zealand

1 posted 2004-01-29 01:24 AM

HEY HEY!!!
AMAZING MAN!! AND U SED U DIDNT LIKE RHYMING UR A FREAKN NATURAL MAN!
KEEP GOIN SOPH

LUV BEX

green_itchy_stuff
Senior Member

since 2003-06-26

Posts 1929
New Caney, Tx

2 posted 2004-01-29 02:14 PM

Its good. I liked it. I have a question are you male or female. The first impression i got was female. Just seemed that way.
-GIS

Hatered and lies go hand-in-hand, while love is always truth.

[I do it for the love... ...I do it from the bottom of my heart.]-Smile Empty Soul

NightFall
Member

since 2004-01-28

Posts 88
The land known as England

3 posted 2004-01-29 04:47 PM

Thats so cool! But is there anyone inparticular whom you are writing about?

darkness_witch
Senior Member

since 2003-12-03

Posts 516
Underneath

4 posted 2004-01-29 10:48 PM

hey thanx everyone for replying

GIS yes ur right I am female! and thanx
Nightfall I originally wrote this ages ago wen i was having "problems" with my boyfrend.... I changed it alot to make it better .

catch yas later

darkness

Please answer, I'm calling just to find out if you could be there for me when I crack - finger 11

MGROVES

Member Elite

since 2004-02-01

Posts 3802
california

5 posted 2004-02-01 10:33 PM

I READ YOUR WORD, FELT YOUR PAIN, MY HEART REACHES OUT. MY SOUL WANTS TO ABSORB THE EVIL THAT YOUR FEARS KEEP NEAR. I JUST STARTED LETTING THE WORLD KNOW HOW I FEEL AND WHO I AM, I KNOW I AM NOT ALONE, AND YOU NEED TO KNOW NEITHER OR YOU. I JUST POSTED ON OPEN POETRY 1 AND CRITICS ANALYSIS. PLEASE READ. I TRULY WOULD LIKE YOUR FEED BACK, IT IS TIME WE STOP WHAT IS HAPPENING TO US. NUMBERS BRING STRENGTH, REMEMBER, THEY PLAY ARE FEARS, THEY TAKE OUR GOODNESS (HEART) THEY STEAL OUR SOULS, THEY WANT, BUT THEY DONT KNOW HOW TO KEEP, OR LOVE OR RESPECT. YOU ARE VERY GIFTED KEEP IT UP THANKYOU

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