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darkness_witch
Senior Member

since 2003-12-03

Posts 516
Underneath

0 posted 2004-01-21 12:13 PM

A creature lurks
In the shadows of your room
In the deep dark corners
No-one forgets

You lie tucked up contented
Barely aware of what is about to come
Dreaming of a better place
The creature pounces

The creature is there to remind you
Of what you used to be
Of what your life now descended from
And of what lies in the corner of your mind

The creatures touches thoughts
Thoughts you try to avoid
Thoughts that changed your life dramatically
Thoughts of your old times

The creature reminds you
Like when you chew the inside of your cheek
Until it is rugged
And every now and again you tounge flicks against it

Just to remind you
Depression fades
But never leaves

As the creature pounces
You roll over to greet it
Welcome it, almost, back
Thats it

Your gone
Trapped once again
In the relentless world of
The creature's antics

Gothika_07
Member

since 2004-01-15

Posts 61
new zealand

1 posted 2004-01-21 03:04 AM

HEY HEY!
YES I FIND I HVE THE SAME PROBLEM WIV MY CHEEK i do chew it til its raw bloody annoys me!
lovely poem very meaningful.
at first i thought we were leanin towards a vampire type poem.
but then it turned and changed like a rollercoaster!!!!
WOW

bex!!!! XOXOXOXOX

mysticpoe
Senior Member

since 2003-02-28

Posts 883

2 posted 2004-01-21 09:35 AM

The creature is there to remind you
Of what you used to be
Of what your life now descended from
And of what lies in the corner of your mind

Hi Darkness, this is very dark. Like, verryyy slowly, falling into a dark cavern surrounded by protruding rocks. "To the center of your mind". The last comment is from an old 60's song. Nice write.

wayne

If nothing is something
then everything is
our thoughts and feelings
and all that exists.

River
Senior Member

since 2003-09-16

Posts 627
my own little world

3 posted 2004-01-21 11:46 AM

very impressive darkness

i liked this.

- River

rest upon existence. seek life,
and forever never die.

darkness_witch
Senior Member

since 2003-12-03

Posts 516
Underneath

4 posted 2004-01-21 11:12 PM

Thanks guys...!
Mystic- wow!!! i take that as such a compliment cus thats exactly wat i was aiming for in the poem!!! and nice quote... i like it!
River- Thanks as well u always do such good work its cool that u say u liked it

thanks agen... i tried so hard on this one!

darkness

serenities_blood
Member

since 2003-12-21

Posts 56
New Zealand

5 posted 2004-01-22 01:20 AM

My little sophie...my how you've grown!!!
NAH LOL JUST WANTED TO SAY THAT!!!
BUT WAT THE HEY!!! (wink wink)
You my dear immortal child, are a truly talented POET (try saying that with a french accent, seriously it sounds so sophistacated!!!)
MUST BE OFF!! Have some Tessa Duder writing to complete...IM SOO EXCITED!!!

xoxLORxox

Who says a woman cannot serve?
It would be my pleasure

Unseamedsoul
Junior Member

since 2004-01-22

Posts 11
Rowesville , S.C.

6 posted 2004-01-22 06:37 PM

I'm new here.. But this poem was great.. I hope that this website will be better then the others that I have posted my poetry on !! But please keep up the good work I would love to read more from you !!

darkness_witch
Senior Member

since 2003-12-03

Posts 516
Underneath

7 posted 2004-01-22 07:44 PM

hey unseamed...
thanks for replying... this one is wicked as!!! (love ur name btw... very dark)

thanx laura!!!! lol

darkness

Vagabond
Member

since 2004-01-23

Posts 163

8 posted 2004-01-27 12:20 PM

I've read this poem so many times I've decied just to save it and keep if you don't mind
I like this part:
Just to remind you
Depression fades
But never leaves

Vagabon the Lost One

aussie teen
Member

since 2003-09-27

Posts 396
Australia

9 posted 2004-02-11 04:34 AM

hey there yet another amazing poem by you darkness.....
it is true that depression never fades but there is one amazing way of counteracting it....
whenever im feeling down i think of something completely hysterical and start laughing.... even if im in the middle of a class at school i start laughing which is why i get called completely insane..... but hey its better than being depressed..... it also works to think of something funny before bed and you get a little more time to yourself away from the 'creature' that lurks in the back of everyones minds.....
again i have to say amazing write.
Mel

so this is me but what do you care about that????

Hollow_Emptiness
Senior Member

since 2004-02-01

Posts 715
New Zealand

10 posted 2004-02-11 01:29 PM

OOOOOOHHHHH Soph thats swwweeeeeeeet dude,
Yeah everyone has that creature at the back of their mind, but now this is going to give me nightmares its so good! (nightmares cuz of the creature waiting to pounce, ahhhhh)

Hey u really do have to say that thing with a french accent, veeeeerrrrry classy.

Love this poem so much, bookmarked it

Later dude,
Hollow

I linger in the shadows, I breathe when I see you.

Vagabond
Member

since 2004-01-23

Posts 163

11 posted 2004-02-16 08:09 AM

auisse teen i must inform you, you are wrong that will never work

Vagabon the Lost One

kissa~rachelle
Senior Member

since 2003-11-27

Posts 988
nowhere special

12 posted 2004-02-21 09:22 PM

I love this poem. It is very dark, and true. Too many times have i been tormented by that creature, always dragging me back, down down down...into that black hole of depression. I'm saving this.

~Vampire Kisses

I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling

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