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Where are my angels
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Where are my angels |
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silhouetted Senior Member
since 2004-01-30
Posts 537New Zealand 
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You're mothers' child, but night lays you down Hair aflame, wild look in your eyes Naked belly to the ground A forest fire nibbles at your veins Crawls up your arm, runs away with your mind And burns dry thoughts like leaves Eyes stare up, but something's in the way In the Bible only angels have wings And the rest must wait to be saved A dry tongue screams at the sky But the wind just breathes words in As a strange bird tries to fly Pieces of us die everyday as though our flesh were hell Such injustice, as children we are told that from God we fell Where are my angels? Where's my golden one? Where's my hope now that my heros have gone? Some are being beaten, some are being born And some can't tell the difference anymore Quote on my thoughts today. Please say what you think on these words. LOR Silhouetted by Deception |
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darkness_witch Senior Member
since 2003-12-03
Posts 516Underneath |
I THINK.... ITS JEWEL You can always hear a tear in Cobain's voice, the pain going on there is always visible through his lyrics - Marilon Manson |
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River Senior Member
since 2003-09-16
Posts 627my own little world |
wow, these are powerful words, i like this, great job! - River sleep my precious slumber |
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Vagabond Member
since 2004-01-23
Posts 163 |
your angle is dead Vagabon the Lost One |
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Masked Intruder
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Senior Member
since 1999-05-23
Posts 1231Near golden sunsets |
Well, I can't say your angle is dead, because you certainly took the theme from a great angle. Your angel, however, I doubt is dead either. Probably just watching from the background. Keep up the good work. |
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Hollow_Emptiness Senior Member
since 2004-02-01
Posts 715New Zealand |
Love, the last line! i love it, the poem is soooooooooo awesome, and like where are those angels? aren't we meant to be saved by our guardian angels? why are so many children dead, what is it "Gods way," or something? I think those angels are doing a slack job of rescuing all the little kids, who have drowned or what not. Your poem has brought that alight to me. I love it, its great. Keep posting baby! (Bread said Johnny Debb today! When will bread learn?) I saw him steal the light away |
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silhouetted Senior Member
since 2004-01-30
Posts 537New Zealand |
lol i agree i think these 'angels' arent doing their job btw this is a jewel song, but i just really wanted some feedback on wat peeple thought of it cuz i thgouth the lyrics were so powerful! !! LOR In the bible on angels have wings, and the rest must wait to be saved - Jewel |
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kissa~rachelle Senior Member
since 2003-11-27
Posts 988nowhere special |
I love Jewel. My mother listens to her all the time, and now i do too, and i usually dont listen to that stuff much. More into like Linkin Park, Finger 11, slipknot, that kind of stuff. Her stuff is very powerful. ~Vampire Kisses  I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling |
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silhouetted Senior Member
since 2004-01-30
Posts 537New Zealand |
She is so powerful i dont even understand it sometimes i have been listening to her music and poems since 1995 I'm also into that kind of stuff, but jewel is the only thing different for me and the only reason y i like her is cuz her lyrics are so powerful and interesting and shes so talented. Shes my idol poet/writer. Shes awesome. Such great power there LOR In the bible on angels have wings, and the rest must wait to be saved - Jewel [This message has been edited by silhouetted (02-21-2004 09:32 PM).] |
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Paper Tiger Member
since 2003-09-28
Posts 77 |
Very well written. "Where are my angels? Where's my golden one? Where's my hope now that my heros have gone?" Hope to read some more of your work in the near future.  We see much, observe little, and perceive less. |
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