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angelfacegurl Member
since 2008-04-17
Posts 67Swartz Creek, MI 
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you bring me hope i found new ways to cope with your hug its better than a drug i cant get enough you make me weak but tough i can stick up for you i dont want you to go through life like i did but still your just a kid im weak with your touch and i love you so much you never held a groudge when i came you didnt judge you loved me as if i was always there ans thats why i care you took one big part and that was my heart i saw it in your eyes like a big suprise so when you hurt or sick i wish i could have took the pick and made it me to you my love is free as i open my heart up lindsey it will never shut atleast not to you believe me because its true you stole me away but thats ok it was meant to be becuase i love you as you love me |
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ken206573 Member
since 2008-10-14
Posts 487 |
i was touched by this poem. i like it. |
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Dreamflight Junior Member
since 2008-10-22
Posts 15USA |
I like the sentiments in this poem, but the rhymes sound forced. Not all poetry has to rhyme - maybe you should try a style that allows for more freedom. That way you'd be able to express yourself without so many limitations, and be able to choose the words you want, instead of the words that rhyme. =) I left it all behind, and never said goodbye... |
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