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Dark Poetry #4

This Weight

Yoinn
Senior Member

since 2007-08-16

Posts 649
Michigan

0 posted 2008-10-04 09:20 PM

This Weight

As always,
there is this weight.
My feet sinking so far down
I barely move much anymore.

I know about the heads turning,
I know there are whispers.
I watch the ground when I walk.
There is no need to look up
to know where I am going.

My rage,
My screams,
never break the surface.
They just fester and eat away
at who I was.

As always,
there is this weight.

Yoin

Juju
Member Elite

since 2003-12-29

Posts 3429
In your dreams

1 posted 2008-10-09 10:45 PM

Thats why becoming stronger is awsome. It is like no one wants to put you down.

love
Juju

-Juju

-"So you found a girl
Who thinks really deep thougts
What's so amazing about really deep thoughts " Silent all these Years, Tori Amos

gator89
Junior Member

since 2008-10-08

Posts 12
Ohio, USA

2 posted 2008-10-10 01:38 AM

i really liked this one and had to read it a few times to really let it sink in. sometimes you just gotta let out all that stuff bottled inside. the last verse really hit deep:

"My rage,
My screams,
never break the surface.
They just fester and eat away
at who I was."

stay strong and keep up the good work

“I'd rather be hated for who I am, than loved for who I am not.” -Kurt Cobain RIP

Yoinn
Senior Member

since 2007-08-16

Posts 649
Michigan

3 posted 2008-10-11 05:32 PM

Thanks gator and juju for your kind advice and comments on my poem. My poetry is the needle that breaks the pus sack of depression....(ewww). lol

Yoin

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