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Dark Poetry #4

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MysticClear01
New Member

since 2008-05-31

Posts 3

0 posted 2008-05-31 11:47 AM

The city is filled with shadows.
Shadows that led him to a pit stop
After taking the elevators up the towering building,
And descending the many steep steps.
He cuddles himself for safety,
And peeks down.
What he sees is where he prefers to be.
The one scene where he can be isolated.
No distractions.
He can’t hear the loud engines
Of the vehicles, newly invented.
He has no prosperity.
What he can do now is watch the sun rise
From behind his apartment building.
But will it rise,
Or would the clouds give out a surprise?
A surprise which no one would clue in the difference;
If it startles him off the edge,
Or makes a river down his cheek.
Not even the birds

voice2bheard
Senior Member

since 2007-10-19

Posts 591
New York

1 posted 2008-06-09 10:53 AM

I have a song with this same title except the words are completely different but I liked your words very strong and I loved it!!

Kate

XGarapanX
Senior Member

since 2008-06-19

Posts 1435
Antarctica

2 posted 2008-06-20 08:28 PM

Definitely strong. Paints a vivid picture throughout. Great poem here.

PoetsPlay
Member

since 2007-12-22

Posts 56
California

3 posted 2008-07-20 01:09 PM

You've got really strong emotions in this. It's really good!

Alexandra

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