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A Beautiful Disaster
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since 2007-01-13

Posts 409

0 posted 2007-12-14 02:46 PM

She's sitting beside the window
And watching the falling rain;
Days turn into weeks, life passes by,
And she is alone again.
Nobody remembers she's still alive,
But she is not even ten.

She's listening to all feeble voices within,
To misery and pain she will never give in.
In lonely tears she tries to forgive...
In years she'll have just one reason to live.
But she knows that's worth it...

The world is so cruel... No one knows she cries.
If somebody saw, they would never care why.
Her dreams and the world will be always apart.
And no one will put back the shards of her heart.

She's listening to all feeble voices within,
To misery and pain she will never give in.
In lonely tears she tries to forgive...
In years she'll have just one reason to live.
But she knows that's worth it...

She wakes up with fear to meet the new day,
She already knows it will bring just more pain.
But no one cares, no one understands -
She puts on the mask, trying hard to pretend.

I close my eyes and through years I see
That girl near the window is ten year old me.
She never lost hope and the wish to forgive,
And now she has that one reason to live.
And this reason is you.

eternally_singing
Member

since 2007-12-18

Posts 123
PA, United States

1 posted 2007-12-20 08:21 PM

Great poem! It strongly portrayed a feeling of determination and a will to live. We all need strength like that otherwise we can not deal with life.

Thank you for sharing this.

XxForever.BrokenxX
Senior Member

since 2008-01-20

Posts 891
Neverland

2 posted 2008-01-26 02:06 AM

yeah i agree, this really shows what it takes to grab a readers attetion. great job!!

FoReVeR.BrOkEn

Assassin_of_Verse
Member

since 2007-10-23

Posts 330
that So Cal

3 posted 2008-01-26 02:49 AM

This poem was nicely written and very insightful. I loved this line:
"And no one will put back the shards of her heart."
No one is really going to help you stand up. You have to pick yourself up. I also loved the twist at the end.

We are each of us angels with only one wing. And we can only fly by embracing each other.
-Luciano De Creshenzo

An assassin-in-training shouldn't.

shattered-smiles
Member

since 2008-01-20

Posts 247
inside the shadows

4 posted 2008-01-26 08:58 AM

These lines were my favourite of the poem,

But no one cares, no one understands -
She puts on the mask, trying hard to pretend

They just popped out at me and made me realize my own life. I can't believe how much this reflected my life in this poem. Definatly going in the library. And, wow, the ending was great! Quite a turn in the poem. Keep on writing.
TJ

[&] she's a blood broken rose

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