Broken Tears, Broken Smiles... A Broken World, A Corrupted File

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Dark Poetry #4

Broken Tears, Broken Smiles... A Broken World, A Corrupted File

RevengeIsMine
Senior Member

since 2006-07-08

Posts 820
Australia

0 posted 2007-10-26 09:40 PM

I guess your happy now
That my tears have smudged this ink
My eye is still throbbing
Its turned black from shades of pink
The tears are still falling
And I don’t know how to make them stop
I need the kiss of death
And to the ground I wish to drop

I wish this was all a dream
And that soon I shall awake
I guess I really couldn’t have it all
And this is the icing on the cake

You say he didn’t need to start it
That my brother caused this all
The truth is that your lying
It was you that made this hell

Don’t bother saying that you love me
Because I’ve heard it all before
You still keep on saying it
But hell it only happens more

Now you lying on the ground
Passed out from all this mess
N heres everyone telling me its my fault
You just shouldn’t have done that Jess

I guess the truth is that I hate myself
For every little thing I’ve done
But I can’t live this life anymore
Because it’s bringing me undone

Bitter tears will haunt my past
And they will be forever falling
And I know this black eye will stay awhile
But I’m certain it wont last

Today you lost your daughter
You buried her alive
You drowned me in a pool of insults
And I couldn’t be revived
You can sling your insults
And I’ll try my best not to cry
You can throw your punches
And I’ll try my best to die…

Well i posted this poem on teen but since then i have changed the title. I'm after some critique.. Enjoy!

Mystress May
Member

since 2007-10-25

Posts 296
Taunton, MA

1 posted 2007-10-26 09:55 PM

Very powerful.... the ending is amazing!

RevengeIsMine
Senior Member

since 2006-07-08

Posts 820
Australia

2 posted 2007-10-27 07:54 AM

Thanks very much for your comment

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