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Melody Behind The Chaos
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Melody Behind The Chaos |
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andrey Junior Member
since 2007-04-27
Posts 29 |
This anxious wait for my turn For all those things I want to learn Teenage eyes and bleeding skin Everything that's held within Plug me in... Sickening wait for it's return Light the match then watch it burn Dreadful whispers - my evil grin Take me high as I've ever been To let me go It's my sin... Just remember... I will return |
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Twilight Warrior Member
since 2007-02-22
Posts 106The World That Never Was |
This poem was okay, but it could have been better. The ending of a poem has to sum up everything that was said in a poem. I felt your ending was a bit out of place. I am no expert so this advice might not help at all. Good luck. "One last drink and the bottle breaks, returning us to the dust from whence we came" |
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