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Dark Poetry #4

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8-trigrams
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since 2007-10-17

Posts 9

0 posted 2007-10-19 07:19 AM

In this world nothins free
Theres a hole in society
Seventh grade girls loosin their virginity
Dead are patriots and dignity
To the highest bidder goes rationality
Followed by life and all those free

So heres to you uncle sam
For leavin all the conscripted, wounded-lyin in the sand
Yeah karma's still there but lets be frank
The guy who invented it, is as rich as the bank

So the time goes by and some are still free
Over-sized taxes and fricken large fees
Apparaently they're damn neccessity's
Eating nothin but dog food, the people are still free

All the dead make it hard to breathe
The weak'll freak out and start to wheeze
Gas will fill lungs
Followed by anger, regret and many guns.

And silence will follow after souls are torn from men
A centry forward it'll all happen again...

hunnie_girl

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since 2006-06-18

Posts 2567
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1 posted 2007-10-19 07:56 PM

wow I love this and how true is it too.. very good write
Krysti

8-trigrams
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since 2007-10-17

Posts 9

2 posted 2007-10-19 10:47 PM

Thanks, but again i feel that the last half has that rushed feeling , im not sure if any1 else got that feeling though

Abbeon
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since 2006-11-30

Posts 228
Curiousity, and wonder

3 posted 2007-10-25 05:23 PM

I liked your poem well crafted. your a good writer.

Abbeon

The world behind these thoughtful eyes, caution may seem crazy.

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